Then there were none.

[Dylan di Vilde]

I just broke a cut crystal glass
now we’ve got an odd number alas
I thought it might play a nice tune
but I dinged it too hard with a spoon.

It belonged to a very posh set -
the best, at the time, you could get. 
A wedding gift brought to the door
by a high flying brother in law 
who of his success loved to shout 
by flashing his money about.

I said: We won’t save ‘em for best
but use ‘em along with the rest.
I’m not an inelegant bloke 
but still, one by one, they got broke.

It’s not a significant crime
just a sign of the passage of time.
Like a knee giving way
or a hair turning grey
or accepting you’re now past your prime.

Or wondering how you were so unaware
that something familiar is no longer there.
A state of unnoticed decay
as parts of your life drop away.
 
There used to be six
now there are three,
their clumsy destruction 
all down to me.

One day when I’m gone
There’ll be none.

Or perhaps just one.

- A memorial thing
that makes a nice ding.

[Mark H]

Good.

Are you working up to another collection?

[bri h]

I always look forward to a 'Dylan.'

[heidi52]

Always a pleasure to read your work, and I liked this, however the rhythm didn't quite work in a number of lines, and there's a repeat "of the" in S3 L2.

I know this is the gallery and I'm not supposed to crit, but you are usually so meticulous I thought you might like the feedback. Forgive me if you'd rather not.

[Dylan di Vilde]

Mark,
I’m not working up another collection at the moment. Not as such.  I’m a bit stuck for ideas. Hence the poems about old mattresses, drying paint and a broken wine glass.



Brian,
Cheers.


Heidi,
You’re right. I am normally so meticulous. Now I am guilty of gross meticulouslessness.

I shall take my revolver and a very large glass of scotch into the study.
     
In the meantime, after 24 hrs, I’ve revised this. Like I should have done in the first place.


Thanks
DdV

[Mark H]

Mark,
I’m not working up another collection at the moment. Not as such.  I’m a bit stuck for ideas.

Me too. Have been for years. It's quite annoying isn't it?