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Re: Been There Done That. 1068 words. Gay/Adult Themes. No swearing.
« Reply #30 on: February 23, 2013, 06:18:24 PM »
I find I can't read a book as a reader anymore :'(

Guys, you can all write. Maybe you're just overthinking it.
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Re: Been There Done That. 1068 words. Gay/Adult Themes. No swearing.
« Reply #31 on: February 23, 2013, 06:20:22 PM »
Thanks for the encouraging words of support sas and welcome too Ds. I think defeating is too strong a word Sas. I prefer challenging. I'm challenging myself to be a better writer. With ma, shvon, phil and dawn's help, it's starting to sink in. Like I keep telling shvon and phil, "I'll write something interesting to engage them if it kills me!" Thanks again. Later ma. Got a tipsy-skinny to contend with and she's so demanding! ha ha. Do this! Do that! Touch me there! Keep doing that! I'll tell you when to stop!(Billy Connolly) ha ha. bri.
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Re: Been There Done That. 1068 words. Gay/Adult Themes. No swearing.
« Reply #32 on: February 23, 2013, 06:24:44 PM »
Just to show you how bad my writing was. This was my first piece up for review here.  :-[ Yep and I let all the entrants rip with it.
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http://mywriterscircle.com/index.php?topic=46859.0

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Re: Been There Done That. 1068 words. Gay/Adult Themes. No swearing.
« Reply #33 on: February 23, 2013, 06:26:05 PM »
about the book thingy. I'm the same. I cant read a book anymore without critting it! I've just finished a book by Ernest Hemingway's grandson. The Tomb of Alexander. Right up my street, as it were. Except he's a custodian of the Met(I think?)in his real life, and you can tell. It's a complete info-dump! All the way through it. Fine, if you want to further your interest in works of art. But not if you're waiting for a "story" to unfold. Ma, I know what you're gonna say next so don't bother cos I was still reading it while the inks were happening! ha ha. :-*
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Re: Been There Done That. 1068 words. Gay/Adult Themes. No swearing.
« Reply #34 on: February 23, 2013, 06:28:17 PM »
Thanks for the honesty, Ma. I certainly appreciate it.  I wonder what mine was? A steaming pile of ;)
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Re: Been There Done That. 1068 words. Gay/Adult Themes. No swearing.
« Reply #35 on: February 23, 2013, 06:30:16 PM »
Just to show you how bad my writing was. This was my first piece up for review here.  :-[ Yep and I let all the entrants rip with it.
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http://mywriterscircle.com/index.php?topic=46859.0

Pulitzer anyone? Wow! Is that really how you posted it ma? Am so impressed by this. (for the wrong, but right reasons) This gives me lots of hope. Cheers for revealing your soft under-belly. x
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Re: Been There Done That. 1068 words. Gay/Adult Themes. No swearing.
« Reply #36 on: February 23, 2013, 06:33:53 PM »
What you are all forgetting is we are all here to learn, just at varying levels. So in effect we're all in the same boat. ;)

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Re: Been There Done That. 1068 words. Gay/Adult Themes. No swearing.
« Reply #37 on: February 23, 2013, 06:34:36 PM »
Definitely, Ma. Thanks for showing us that, and I'd like to say that while it has errors in the punctuation, etc., you're still not shabby as a storyteller, which is obvious even in that early work. Glad you're here helping guide us new writers. :) :)

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Re: Been There Done That. 1068 words. Gay/Adult Themes. No swearing.
« Reply #38 on: February 23, 2013, 06:40:45 PM »
tongue firmly in cheek, ;D you're such a suck up, ma responded to the words. Preening, checking the nails, buffed the hair, trying her best to look urbane and interesting replied, "Yes, I am good, aren't I?"  ;D ;D ;D ;D
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Re: Been There Done That. 1068 words. Gay/Adult Themes. No swearing.
« Reply #39 on: February 23, 2013, 06:45:23 PM »
Punctuation has always been my nemesis Sas. I'm still the worlds worst, but now I recognise some of it, but I will never be a grammarian. ;D

I don't hide that fact and everyone is use to me cocking it up. I read books, I even tried a course, but it might as well have been in chinese. ;)

You all will start recognising different stages of writing, but don't try getting every concept right at once. Baby steps and move on to the next obstacle.

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Re: Been There Done That. 1068 words. Gay/Adult Themes. No swearing.
« Reply #40 on: February 23, 2013, 06:48:24 PM »
Everyone on here has their own agenda, those who are willing to make mistakes publically in order to learn from the crits/comments will probably make more progress than those who don't IMO.

This is actually quite a safe, independent environment where people are being supportive. There's no -- 'if you like my ms I'll like yours' crap going on like some other sites. Each piece is judged on its own merit. We try new things occasionally -- sometimes we get it right and sometimes we make a dreadful hash of it all, forgetting the earlier lessons. It's all good.com. :D

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Re: Been There Done That. 1068 words. Gay/Adult Themes. No swearing.
« Reply #41 on: February 23, 2013, 06:49:02 PM »
I got content. I got amount. I got voice. I got things to say. Interesting things, judging by the amount of crits. The only problem I  have is Show.Tell. Tenses.
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Re: Been There Done That. 1068 words. Gay/Adult Themes. No swearing.
« Reply #42 on: February 23, 2013, 06:50:03 PM »
 . . .  erm, and losing redundancies. ;D :o

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Re: Been There Done That. 1068 words. Gay/Adult Themes. No swearing.
« Reply #43 on: February 23, 2013, 06:51:01 PM »
. . .  erm, and losing redundancies. ;D :o

I had a sneaking suspicion you're list would be infinately bigger than mine. ;D
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Re: Been There Done That. 1068 words. Gay/Adult Themes. No swearing.
« Reply #44 on: February 23, 2013, 06:54:22 PM »
Now, Bri' you know I'm a mate. ;)