Hiya Pale, thanks for taking the time with this and critting it. I've done with it for the time being. On the good advice of others on this wonderful site, I've been persuaded to stop editing old stuff and work on new things. I'm guilty I'm afraid, of making a lot of mistakes and compounding them by doing edits and re-posts almost straight away. I have something wrong with me memory and I forget things. i'm not lazy or owt, I just have to write things down or risk forgetting, like I did with most of my pieces, so I don't blame any of the guys for adv me to leave off for a while. As I've said here enough times, I actually thought I had a good education in matters of English Lit, it wasn't until I came here that I found out I haven't. I need now, to get a better education then come back, and post. I'll keep going in diff writing projects but try my best not to post until I'm at least reasonably sure I have the techie ability to do so. I have great contentIMO to write, but no real techie ability to get it across the page properly or accurately, thanks again. Bri.
modifyer, sorry meant to say, I'll look at taking the first para out or just changing it around. b