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Dave Driver

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Re: My first ever attempt at this...
« Reply #15 on: September 12, 2006, 03:34:14 PM »
Angeleyes

While we`ve got vampires on the brain,I`ve just had a thought.

When little old Oliver marched to the front of the workhouse and said,"Please Sir can I have some more?" Mr Bumble went berserk.

But imagine his response if Oliver had bared fangs,shouted "Okay I`ll settle for your blood then." And ripped out his throat.

Okay I`m going now,the green van with the square wheels is waiting for me outside.


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Re: My first ever attempt at this...
« Reply #16 on: September 12, 2006, 11:03:35 PM »
Angeleyes

You have a great start here and I wanted to know more, more, more!!
(and that's the mark of a good start - pulling us in, wanting more!)

As a playwright, and I think this goes as well for scriptwriters, and I'm in
the US mind you, so what I say is probably backwardass b/c of our prez, but
I digress - I won't go there.   >:(   :-[

mmm, okay, as a playwright, an list of characters and their ages, sizes,
features, relationships to each other, is always after the title page and/or
synopsis.

One exercise I learned in playwrighting class, it's called Etudes.
you can write an Etude for everything, basically, for a character, it's
their back story. Where they were born, what kind of childhood,
teen years, specific moments (if you have the time and really want
to delve into the phych of your character) everything. Write scenes
with your characters and people who are real - the president of a
big corporation, the pastor of a church. just to see how your characters
interact.
Basically, what the prof said was to let the characters tell you what and
who they are.
Sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't.
There are tons of books about script writing and exercises to get
your script where you want it to go.

Hope I helped a little!

Can't wait to read the next scene - vampires or cute little teddy bears -
whichever, I'm on the edge of my seat!!
Peace, Gina

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Re: My first ever attempt at this...
« Reply #17 on: September 13, 2006, 01:34:32 AM »
Thank you so much Spherical Time (great name!). Do you know if you describe the character as he is mentioned, for example:
HE APPEARS FROM UNDER THE CAR AND TURNS OFF THE RADIO. HE IS THIRTY ONE YEARS OLD HAS  MESSY, SHOULDER LENGTH HAIR AND A STUBBLY BEARD. HIS DIRTY WHITE T-SHIRT SHOWS OFF HIS TONED PHYSYQUE.

Or, something like that? And do you do that for every new character who is introduced? Sorry for asking so many questions.
Yes, that's perfect.  You want to describe outside appearance.

And, yes, do that every time a character is introduced.  At least, if you were writing a television or movie script you would.

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Re: My first ever attempt at this...
« Reply #18 on: September 13, 2006, 03:06:34 AM »
Angeleyes - you didn't know what a touch paper you were lighting when you posted this.

I've enjoyed the Vampire exchanges, but not being into fangs and blood too much - might the story be a 'Christmas Carol' take with the mechanic being the Scrooge part and the young motorist a spirit of Christmas past or future?

Chip

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Re: My first ever attempt at this...
« Reply #19 on: September 13, 2006, 04:39:06 AM »
Angeleyes

You have a great start here and I wanted to know more, more, more!!
(and that's the mark of a good start - pulling us in, wanting more!)

As a playwright, and I think this goes as well for scriptwriters, and I'm in
the US mind you, so what I say is probably backwardass b/c of our prez, but
I digress - I won't go there.   >:(   :-[

mmm, okay, as a playwright, an list of characters and their ages, sizes,
features, relationships to each other, is always after the title page and/or
synopsis.

One exercise I learned in playwrighting class, it's called Etudes.
you can write an Etude for everything, basically, for a character, it's
their back story. Where they were born, what kind of childhood,
teen years, specific moments (if you have the time and really want
to delve into the phych of your character) everything. Write scenes
with your characters and people who are real - the president of a
big corporation, the pastor of a church. just to see how your characters
interact.
Basically, what the prof said was to let the characters tell you what and
who they are.
Sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't.
There are tons of books about script writing and exercises to get
your script where you want it to go.

Hope I helped a little!

Can't wait to read the next scene - vampires or cute little teddy bears -
whichever, I'm on the edge of my seat!!


WOW, what a mine of information you are! Thank you!! It's very helpful to receive this sort of information as I a total novice to this sort of writing, so every little helps.
I think I know which direction this is going to go but I'm not going to let the cat out of the bag just yet. :D I'm hoping to post some more later today, so keep watching and let me know what you think.

Thanks again!
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Re: My first ever attempt at this...
« Reply #20 on: September 13, 2006, 04:41:10 AM »
Angeleyes

While we`ve got vampires on the brain,I`ve just had a thought.

When little old Oliver marched to the front of the workhouse and said,"Please Sir can I have some more?" Mr Bumble went berserk.

But imagine his response if Oliver had bared fangs,shouted "Okay I`ll settle for your blood then." And ripped out his throat.

Okay I`m going now,the green van with the square wheels is waiting for me outside.




I take it you love vampires!!  ;D :D  I have decided which way the story will go, but I'm not saying just yet! hehe. You will have to read and find out!!
May all your dreams come true.

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Re: My first ever attempt at this...
« Reply #21 on: September 13, 2006, 04:45:36 AM »
Yes, that's perfect.  You want to describe outside appearance.

And, yes, do that every time a character is introduced.  At least, if you were writing a television or movie script you would.

Hi again. Thanks for taking the time to look at this again. You have been more than helpful!  ;D  I'm starting to think more along the lines of a movie script. It's just that the pictures in my head play out like a movie...but then again, writing for tv can be just as good! Aarrrrggh! How on earth do you decide whis is the best format to write in?? :-\
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Re: My first ever attempt at this...
« Reply #22 on: September 13, 2006, 04:51:47 AM »
Angeleyes - you didn't know what a touch paper you were lighting when you posted this.

I've enjoyed the Vampire exchanges, but not being into fangs and blood too much - might the story be a 'Christmas Carol' take with the mechanic being the Scrooge part and the young motorist a spirit of Christmas past or future?

Chip

 ;D ;D ;D

I have decided which way this is going to go, but I'm not saying just yet.

I don't really want to put all of my ideas on the boards, but if anyone is interested in listening to my ideas, please feel free to PM me. Perhaps I'm being too cautious, I don't know.
My main worry is that I have a great character from my book and I like the name I have given him. I'd love to get some imput on it, but at the same time, I don't want to share with just anyone. Am I making sense?  :-\
May all your dreams come true.

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Re: My first ever attempt at this...
« Reply #23 on: September 18, 2006, 06:27:45 PM »
AE:

I agree with the helpful comments that everyone else already said. Only suggestion I have is to write in the active tense. For example, "Coling works" instead of "COLIN IS WORKING." Other than that, good job. If you get a chance, please read my posting. Oh, yeah, I'm new at this too.
Write on,

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Re: My first ever attempt at this...
« Reply #24 on: December 28, 2006, 09:21:59 AM »
OK, first things first.......there, that's better!

Seriously thought Dave, thanks for the compliment. I haven't done any more with this. So thanks for the kick up the backside. I might just have another go now. ;D
May all your dreams come true.

Whether you think you can, or think you can't....you're right!
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