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Offline 6Studios

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Applebees - sketch Comedy - some swears 852 words
« on: July 24, 2012, 12:54:50 PM »
A skit my friends and I wrote a while back, I thought I would edit it now since its been a while, but I figure I will leave it as it was when it was written.

(god this skit is lame)
EDIT: okay re formated. but I can tell people are turned of by this haha. I know its whacky, I just want to make sure it makes sense atleast. can you understand whats going on. also I have already critiqued a few other works.
Two friends are going to hang out with PAUL at his house.

They pull up to house, get out, and walk to Paul's door and knock.

ROY
So this is Paul's new place, its nice.

RODGER
Very nice, a garage and everything. Do you think he already had dinner? I'm starving, could go for a pizza.

ROY
Well lets see what Paul wants to do.

They knock on door, and stand there for like 5-10 SEC, and they just open it .

ROY (CONT'D)
Paul?

Paul walks in from right side.

PAUL
Hey guys, is it just the two?

RODGER
yeah we called earlier. Tom cant come he had to work today.

PAUL
Ah yes, OK let me show you the basement.

They get to the basement and its very decorated, with odd trinkets. And a full bar, a man is in the corner behind bar.

ROY
Wow this is nice!

RODGER
Look at that TV.

PAUL
Ya Its great huh, Hey MILES, these are my friends OK, take care of them.[/center]

MILES
Oh yea, its my job.

RODGER
Who, is that Paul?

PAUL
That's MILES, he our "bartender" ha-ha, so can I get you guys something to drink? We have coke and diet coke orange fanta.[/center]

PAUL pulls out note pad and clicks his pen.

PAUL (CONT'D)
And Pepsi.

The friends have to pause and think

ROY
Well RODGER and I were thinking of getting ordering a pizza.

PAUL
Well I'm asking about drinks but whatever.

Paul Laughs

PAUL (CONT'D)
...OK, I will just start you guys off with water OK. Take a seat.

ROY takes a seat, RODGER stands looking around.

MILES
Can I get you guys anything?

RODGER
No I'm OK.

MILES points to ROY.

ROY
You have a spotted cow?

RODGER
I'm going to use the bathroom OK.

Rodger walks to the bathroom and as hes about to open it a guy walks out.

RODGER
Ah sorry.

RODGER
Oh that's okay, wait.

RANDY stops and looks at RODGER

RODGER
Hi, I'm RODGER.

RANDY looks confused at RODGER

RANDY
You often introduce yourself to random people coming out of the bathroom?

RODGER
I just figure you were a friend of Paul's is all...

RANDY
Who's Paul?

RANDY walks away.

Rodger Looks inside the bathroom and kinda is shocked, a urinal and restaurant style sink. and a small rectangle window to the right facing the bar.

RODGER (CONT'D)
What the hell is this.

Rodger starts using the restroom  and looks up straight, and Miles is just looking at him while cleaning his glass.

RODGER (CONT'D)
..um.

He reaches up and closes a tiny window.
He washes his hands and walks out.
And there is different lighting inside the basement and more odd trinkets and posters all over the walls.

RODGER (CONT'D)
...is it just me.

ROY
God dammit Braun come on!

The tv is on with a brewer game on.
ROY gives a holler
Rodger looking around room.

RODGER
This place kind of looks like Applebees.

ROY
we are at Pauls house...

RODGER
I know that, but look.

Roy looks around.

ROY
..hmm

RODGER
Did the lights change?

ROY
..you know I didn't notice that till you said it. also this isn't a bottle, its from the tap.
As Roy sips down a spotted cow.

Paul comes back with a towel over his shoulder and water on a tray.

PAUL
OK here are the waters. Did you guys think of something to order? Maybe a appetizer?

RODGER
What do you mean order?

PAUL
If you guys are undecided we have a few specials tonight, fillet of tilapia and sea bass, the sea bass tho is a whole sea bass with the head and the tail and everything.

The camera pans over to a chalk board showing the specials.

On the board it reads a fried tilapia

Roy at this point picked up a menu as if he were genuinely interested in getting something to eat.

RODGER
Paul, what the fuck is all this dude?

ROY
(whispers) Can i substitute fries from the rice and beans with the Tilapia?

PAUL
Um, im not sure, let me ask the chef

RODGER
What chef?

PAUL
Look Rodger, i just wanted to get your order in before the dinner rush backed up the kitchen.

RODGER
DINNER RUSH!? What is going on here.

PAUL
Why are you yelling man? I just want to entertain for me friends, have a beer watch the game, eat some food with some friends. Whats so wrong with that.

ROY
Yeah calm down RODGER.

RODGER
I suppose, this all is just giving me a odd vibe.

a man walks up behind Paul

MANAGER
Is everything okay over here Paul

RODGER
Who's this?

PAUL
Yeah everythings okay Kyle, this is my manager.

RODGER
Nope, were leaving ROY come on.

ROY
What? Dude,  my Tilapia.

Rodger walks up the stairs followed by Roy. As they do so they are passed by a couple who are walking down the stairs. Once up stairs they walk past the kitchen which is now filled with cooks, bussling around. Rodger angrily pretends not to see all the cooks and storms out of the house. Before he does however the hostess bids farewell.

HOSTESS
Thanks guys, have a great night!

Once outside they realize that there are now many cars parked outside Paul's house. Rodger angrily gets into his car accompanied by Roy.

RODGER
What the fuck.

ROY
I don't get why we had to go man, we were just hanging with Paul. I'm really hungry now

ROGER
We weren't hanging with Paul, I don't know what that was...but yeah, I'm hungry too.

RODGER
Where do you want to go?

ROY
I'm not gonna lie, I'm actually feeling applebees now.

RODGER
Yeah...put it into the gps i guess.
« Last Edit: July 26, 2012, 10:59:36 AM by 6Studios »

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Re: Applebees - sketch Comedy - some swears 852 words
« Reply #1 on: July 24, 2012, 01:52:41 PM »
hi 6studios,

can you take some time to familiarise yourself with the formatting rules for the script board

http://www.mywriterscircle.com/index.php/topic,39962.0.html

and then reformat it so it's easier on the eye.

you may also find people willing to critique if you critique at least two other pieces on the boards.

thanks,

daryl