Author Topic: Neighbourhood Watch  (Read 1219 times)

Offline Mark H

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Re: Neighbourhood Watch
« Reply #15 on: February 11, 2012, 02:07:48 PM »
I've read the first and second lines of the revision about 5 times and spent ages scratching my head. I didn't see any point in continuing beyond that. Maybe it's just me, no one else has commented; I have been feeling a bit strange lately.  :(
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Re: Neighbourhood Watch
« Reply #16 on: February 12, 2012, 09:11:52 AM »
Maybe they should be the closing lines instead then? I think the reader needs to see who Mrs Gregg is.

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