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Re: My Front Door in the Dark
« Reply #15 on: February 06, 2012, 09:19:25 PM »
The door to my house
on my staked out claim:.................plat or plot
a square piece of earth.
There's nothing to indicate
if it extends to the global center--
or how far the real estate reach......................or how far my estate reaches
into space.............................you don't need this line.

I don't know my claim to this cosmos......repeated word and you need an 'if'
plunged every day toward the future:
certainly less of that now
than the past.
What a ride................................not good :)
Think of it, my dear,
we have no idea where we've been
much less where we're going.

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Re: My Front Door in the Dark
« Reply #16 on: February 06, 2012, 09:22:32 PM »
Below is my last revision:


My Front Door in the Dark (second revision)

The door to my house
on my staked out claim:
a square piece of earth.
There's nothing to indicate
if it extends to the global center--
or how far my estate reaches
in space.

I don't know
the extent of my claim to this cosmos
plunged every day toward the future
(certainly less of that now
than the past)
a path in a featureless forest.
Think of it, my dear,
we have no idea where we've been
much less where we're going.



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Re: My Front Door in the Dark
« Reply #17 on: February 06, 2012, 09:25:46 PM »
Changed first "claim" to "plot"

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Re: My Front Door in the Dark
« Reply #18 on: February 06, 2012, 09:29:46 PM »
Never say "last revision" indar...its a process   :D
Some day you might consider ditching this:
(certainly less of that now
than the past)

I like it now though!

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Re: My Front Door in the Dark
« Reply #19 on: February 06, 2012, 09:33:53 PM »
OK, revise "last" to "latest". I might ditch the parentetical phrase some day when I am not feeling so aged and vulnerable from a torn rotator cuff >:( >:( >:(

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Re: My Front Door in the Dark
« Reply #20 on: February 06, 2012, 09:43:00 PM »
Yikes my wife had to have surgery for that.

Take it easy.


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Re: My Front Door in the Dark
« Reply #21 on: February 06, 2012, 09:59:03 PM »
I am hopeing to get by with physical therapy but its too soon yet to assess results. Its painful for sure. Hope your wife had good results from the surgery.

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Re: My Front Door in the Dark
« Reply #22 on: February 06, 2012, 10:10:19 PM »
Yes, but the term 'good as new' does not apply.
Most improve lots with physical therapy.

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Re: My Front Door in the Dark
« Reply #23 on: February 06, 2012, 10:57:24 PM »
Ouch -- not a nice injury. Therapy can help, but you do have to put in the work -- lots of it. Enjoy those resistance bands! ;D
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Re: My Front Door in the Dark
« Reply #24 on: February 07, 2012, 10:22:47 AM »
Got one hanging on a door knob---its yellow. 2 sets of ten of each exercise twice a day--and I've only begun with the therapy. Have you been down this road Sio?

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Re: My Front Door in the Dark
« Reply #25 on: February 07, 2012, 11:44:08 AM »
Not a tear myself, just frozen shoulder/s, but one of my rugby playing sons and my husband have both had it happen to them.

Wait till they ask you to change colours and fold the them over to double them up so there is more resistance. >:( >:(
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