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Offline SparkyDashforth

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Re: Stuck in my head-A poem about writers block
« Reply #15 on: February 04, 2012, 02:08:05 PM »
Be careful of helpful publishing sites Art, especially if they want money from you. Think twice.
I don't know how old you are, but you seem naive, stick around and learn.
Read the sticky threads regarding the basic craft of poetry. Write daily,
read as much contemporary poetry as you can.  Learn and apply.

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Re: Stuck in my head-A poem about writers block
« Reply #16 on: February 04, 2012, 02:19:55 PM »
I appreciate that. They are not asking for money, I do stay away from places like that. I hope you understand I apologise. I do have to say I am going to have to get out my dictionary to understand your review. I will have to check them out thank you.

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Re: Stuck in my head-A poem about writers block
« Reply #17 on: February 04, 2012, 02:31:36 PM »
No problem.  Lets see more of your stuff when you don't have writers block ;)

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Re: Stuck in my head-A poem about writers block
« Reply #18 on: February 04, 2012, 02:43:59 PM »
Thank you. I am working on a novel at the moment. Its my first. Sometimes my imagery is perfect and others severely lacking. And first person POV is hard, but I like the challenge. Thanks to people on this site I wrote a hole new first chapter! And its much better then the first one I did. I don't know why I am stuck but still can't seem to get around it. Thank you again for being understanding.

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Re: Stuck in my head-A poem about writers block
« Reply #19 on: February 04, 2012, 02:47:09 PM »
Poetry will help you with your prose writing.  When you learn to word-paint, you
can create deeper visuals as a novelist.  You will also be able to say more with less words.
Good luck.

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Re: Stuck in my head-A poem about writers block
« Reply #20 on: February 04, 2012, 02:50:13 PM »
Art, I think the key points that Sparks makes  it "Stick Around" and soak up the advice it can only strengthing your writing, which I guess is why you are here.

There are loads of sites where all you will get is " your great" but here you will get acknowledgment if it's good but also direction of where things can be improved if it's not.  The bottom line is you can take it or leave it but  all I would say there are expereinced writers on here ( Not me) and it will help you improve.

Keep up the writing.

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Re: Stuck in my head-A poem about writers block
« Reply #21 on: February 04, 2012, 03:26:44 PM »
Thank you. And if any one wants to take a look I am going to post my prologue for my book Helix, and then my new first chapter.

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Stuck in my head-A poem about writers block
« Reply #22 on: February 04, 2012, 07:57:31 PM »

words run round and elude me

I know, it's almost painful when you can't write.  :'(

I've written one, new piece in what, over a year?  Almost two?   :P

Everything screamed:  STOP.  So I did and now I wait.  It will come! 
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I've got some pieces dedicated strictly to your subject.  At least it was something.   ;D

p.s.  I liked your poem.   ;)

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Re: Stuck in my head-A poem about writers block
« Reply #23 on: February 04, 2012, 08:19:12 PM »
Thank you. I will have to go and check those out to!

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« Reply #24 on: February 04, 2012, 08:32:50 PM »
Thank you. I will have to go and check those out to!

Oh, no!  I'm sorry, I wasn't pushing myself on you, Art.
You made me think of some stuff I have, that's all. 

You're sweet.   :)
   

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Re: Stuck in my head-A poem about writers block
« Reply #25 on: February 04, 2012, 08:46:58 PM »
I did want to look if you have any up, if that is alright. If just to see it done a different way.  :)
I'm sorry if I took it the wrong way.

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Re: Stuck in my head-A poem about writers block
« Reply #26 on: February 06, 2012, 03:09:40 PM »
Hi -- we've all had those days -- ***sigh*** but the words on the screen didn't make for much of a poem IMO. The repetitions of idle/idly, sit and fill/full need to be addressed and also your punctuation.

wont ->>> won't

I am stuck in my head
what a sad place to be
words run round and elude me.
Images flash by
some real, some only mine
I stomp, I scream, I let it all out,
I wish for peace, but scramble about.

 
Where have you gone oh muse of mine?
Am I to stay here for all time?
Am I to run round desperate to fly?
If only you'd come lift me to the sky,
if only I could catch those thoughts that fly by.
I sit and wait hands full, [doesn't this contradict the next lines?]
I sit and wish for only you,
you fill my mind
yet my hands sit idly by.

 
How long shall I roam
unable to return home?
Oh muse, where have you gone?
I beg you, won't you come?

 
Make my idle hands fly
across my keyboard, words won't come
still I sit and wait for you to return.
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