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Offline 510bhan

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Re: Freezer
« Reply #15 on: February 05, 2012, 07:40:01 AM »
Hi V -- only got to this once you had done your revsions -- well done. Dark, menacing. ;) ;) ;)
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Re: Freezer
« Reply #16 on: February 07, 2012, 03:27:12 AM »
Thanks Sio.  ;D
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« Reply #17 on: February 07, 2012, 07:22:41 AM »
It's good V. The only issue I have is that the premise is too similar to previous pieces. OK, we all get obsessive about bludgeoning our neighbours, and turning them into cat food, but how many poems should that obsession spawn  :-\
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Re: Freezer
« Reply #18 on: February 07, 2012, 07:42:28 AM »
hmmmm will try to do a piece about daffodils blooming in the spring sunshine........yes you are probably right Mark. It's the day to day tragedies of life I go for ........and the day to day thoughts of the average person...... ;D Or am I a psychopath?
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« Reply #19 on: February 07, 2012, 08:02:22 AM »
Or am I a psychopath?

Depends: How many of your neighbours have you eaten?
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« Reply #20 on: February 07, 2012, 08:04:54 AM »
hmmm people say I don't like my neighbours, that's not true I just can never eat a whole one..........
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« Reply #21 on: February 07, 2012, 02:28:19 PM »
hmmmm will try to do a piece about daffodils blooming in the spring sunshine........

Above the grave of another dead neighbour?  ;-)
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Re: Freezer
« Reply #22 on: February 07, 2012, 02:44:02 PM »
 ;D ;D ;D

pushing up the daffodils....................
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Re: Freezer
« Reply #23 on: February 07, 2012, 04:07:30 PM »
Not to mention the fertilizer used.....

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Re: Freezer
« Reply #24 on: February 08, 2012, 10:31:17 PM »
Vienna:

Another nice one. I like your stuff.

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Re: Freezer
« Reply #25 on: February 09, 2012, 02:35:51 AM »
Cheers Kowboy. Thanks
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