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Offline Lew Charles

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A Dear Friend
« on: September 11, 2011, 06:37:53 AM »
A Dear Friend


It still works today.
It hasn't the kick and stick of last year,
nor does it control my resolve.

I often think the red-robin
of Jane's breast takes me there,
but of course it doesn't,
I'm not so perverse,

and should I fly the straight path -
maybe learn a Latin Language -
I might rediscover myself
a world too late.

But then the shape shift and
curve of Jane's continent is alluring
in its Burlesque,
a kiss in a tissue,
a beating strawberry in a champagne flute,

and I drink from her stained glass,
tarnished - nicotine fingernails opening the
damp curtains in her crumbling house - and
she wants me to get drunk.

But it is not the taste of her breast,
or lips,
the coffee in everyone of our hangovers,
the clash of stained teeth,
the wine smile of sad clowns,

it is the wrinkles that crinkle and sprout from her eyes,
and the black smudges,
telling us each time it has happened,

when the house is lighter,
and the rest have left
to reflect
on their
own thinning skin
or their very own Jane's mottled skin;

it is the cracked nails digging into my back
when tears blur the pancake;

it is the cigarette laugh
in a teacher's lounge,

the warm breath gone bad -
not bad enough to not love.

Yes, it still works today,
not with the stick and kick of a year ago,
and not in the way we would like.
'The best things in life are free.'

Offline bowmore bill

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Re: A Dear Friend
« Reply #1 on: September 13, 2011, 03:13:43 PM »
I really enjoyed this Lew, it holds the intrest from start to finish.
For me it is a stark reminder of where we are all headed, if not already there.
Let me just say, I'm glad that i am not Jane....Nice one.

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Re: A Dear Friend
« Reply #2 on: September 15, 2011, 09:28:24 AM »
Hey there BB, long time no... er... write,

Hope all is well.

Must say I'm a little perplexed by your comment. This one was published in December, I wonder if the editor read it the same way? I guess I'll never know ;) Poetry is naturally open to interpretation - that's my view certainly.

It's about the relationship between an (aging) gay man and his heterosexual female friend. A sort of, kinda, doomed love story.

Lew  :)
'The best things in life are free.'

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Re: A Dear Friend
« Reply #3 on: September 18, 2011, 02:52:45 PM »
Hey there BB, long time no... er... write,

Hope all is well.

Must say I'm a little perplexed by your comment. This one was published in December, I wonder if the editor read it the same way? I guess I'll never know ;) Poetry is naturally open to interpretation - that's my view certainly.

It's about the relationship between an (aging) gay man and his heterosexual female friend. A sort of, kinda, doomed love story.

Lew  :) Hi lew, all is well with me, you also i hope.
I am also perplexed by my comment Lew, really do not know what I was thinking.
Reading it again it becomes clear, i should have twigged when I red the line, should i fly the straight path.
Anyway lew I really enjoyed the read you're grasp of the english language is exceptional
and the ballance of the work is great, this is the way poetry should be written.
Please accept my apoligies first time around.


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Re: A Dear Friend
« Reply #4 on: September 23, 2011, 09:30:19 AM »
Thank you very much, BB, for your kind words  :)
'The best things in life are free.'