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Offline Bar

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Poetry Competition # 46
« on: March 31, 2011, 09:05:00 AM »


My encounter with Aleksander Wat's "My Century" (no, not G. Grass's!) made a lasting impact on my life. In his book (but he also wrote a great poetry), Wat recalls a disappeared world of artistic courage, of political opposition, of evil he met as a prisoner in the Stalinian camps and so much more... His exchanges with Czeslaw Milosz (a Polish poetry Nobel Prize) reach the highest levels of intellectual and spiritual communication. The meeting of those two huge minds is overwhelming, brilliant and so very moving.

This is why I chose a quote by Wat for you to read and tell, in your noblest words, what it awakes or inspires in you, or how it does not.
But it should be a poem (not a dissertation as it might hint), a great poem that shows, shares an experience, a real or made up situation, a thought, an intellectual illustration, an allegory, a concise symbolical, experimental story...

So sharpen your finest pencils, for Challenge #46 asks you to be brief. That it's a hard job I'm the first to know, but don't we learn through boundaries (I do...)?

I suggest we go for an OCTET this time, a stanza of poetry that has eight lines, or two stanzas that have four lines, or two line four stanzas...
If this is too hard, let's push off the limit to a maximum TEN LINES, freely divided... no more, though!!
It can be free verse, rhyme, tragic or accepting, humourous, sarcastic, or saturnine...  

Here is the quote:

"But my life, oh, my life, had been a constant search for an enormous dream in which my fellow creatures and animals, plants, chimeras, stars, and minerals were in a pre-established harmony, a dream that is forgotten because it must be forgotten, and is sought desperately, and only sporadically does one find its tragic fragments in the warmth of a person, in some specific situation, a glance - in memory too, of course, in some specific pain, some moment. I loved that harmony with a passion; I loved it in voices, voices. And then, instead of harmony, there was nothing but scraps and tatters. And perhaps that alone is what it means to be a poet."
Aleksander Wat




Since I'd like us to have a winner by May 1, let's set the deadline for submission to April 20th.  Then TEN more days for voting.

What do you think?

I hope the subject will speak to you. It's dear to me... And I really really hope you'll be many to submit your most refined offerings and that it'll be a hell of a job to decide which is the very best!  :)

Warm regards to all and thanks for your attention and PARTICIPATION!!!

Looking forwards to your reactions,

Bar

P.S. IMPORTANT: PLEASE PM YOUR POEMS TO ME, I'LL FILE THEM ON MY COMPUTER TILL THE VOTE

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Re: POETRY COMPETITION # 46
« Reply #1 on: March 31, 2011, 10:05:55 AM »
That's some challenge Bar! :) :) :)

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Re: POETRY COMPETITION # 46
« Reply #2 on: March 31, 2011, 12:11:20 PM »
Good job, Bar.   :)

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Re: POETRY COMPETITION # 46
« Reply #3 on: March 31, 2011, 01:14:24 PM »
Thanks Sio and eric. Hope to receive your pms as soon as the Muse has whispered to your ears...

Best

Bar
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Re: POETRY COMPETITION # 46
« Reply #4 on: March 31, 2011, 01:42:03 PM »
This speaks to me and reminds me of the first time I read Man's Search for Meaning by Viktor Frankl.  This is definitely a challenge!
--Cyndie

"Why do you do it in the first place? I mean you paint a picture, but you can't explain what it means because the audience is supposed to get it.  But then a judge comes along and says, 'I see this painting, but what you intended for me to see is not what I see; therefore, it isn't'"

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Re: POETRY COMPETITION # 46
« Reply #5 on: April 01, 2011, 03:29:11 PM »
Ok, I'll enter.. Just a newbie, so be kind;

A Good Trade

Trading loneliness for love
Paying for love with longing
We held tight. We kissed deep.
We loved unafraid of the price
Enjoying, we gave each to the other
As only a man and woman who love can do
We made a Good Trade

We captured joy with abandon, how rare, how delicious
Like guests at a wonderful banquet,
Hungry and impolite, we ate as we wanted
The table; beautiful, rich with aroma and tasty
Such feasts are intended for the young,
Still, full of lust, we ate our fill
Savoring every dish, it was a very Good Trade

Years together were not enough
Plans that could never be
All words now finally silent
The price now clear; even so it was a Good trade

We chirped, like happy birds in the sun
Days filled with blissful awe of each others song
Nights spent in anticipation of the morrow, to bask in the sun and chirp again
No danger, just sheltered moments stolen in embrace
My God! It was a Good Trade

Our banquet finished, with dishes in the cupboard
The feast we shared fades into a meadow of memories
Sweet it is, to recall those moments with resigned longing
To want what cannot be had again
No more words, no more chirping, no more songs

Trading loneliness for love
Paying for love in longing
It was a Good Trade,
One I would make a thousand times

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Re: POETRY COMPETITION # 46
« Reply #6 on: April 01, 2011, 03:34:27 PM »
The rule is that a poem which is posted publicly is ineligible for the competition, because the comps are always done in confidence to keep the identity of any of the poets secret until the vote is done.  This is why Bar told everyone to send their poems by personal message (PM) to her.

Correct me if I'm wrong, Mark.
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Re: POETRY COMPETITION # 46
« Reply #7 on: April 01, 2011, 03:41:43 PM »
Hi Eric.. I make quite few mistakes, in general. np., consider it gone

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Re: POETRY COMPETITION # 46
« Reply #8 on: April 01, 2011, 04:22:15 PM »
StevePre, welcome on our boards!
I'm so sorry, you must have misunderstood the rules of the Competition, you could still post your poem in a thread on Review My Poetry or Poetry Workshop for comments/help/opinion, but I can't accept it for the Competition, 1/because by posting it in THIS thread you made it public, 2/because, according to this competition rule, the poem a)is to be inspired by my quote above and b)not exceed TEN lines!!!
I think you just got lost in MWC's maze, but now you'll know! So if you are interested, please do read the theme for COMPETITION #46 and if it inspires you, do write a poem and send me through PERSONAL MESSAGE - just as ERIC guided you!
Sorry again, hope to count you among the candidates!!!!! Best of all, Bar
Facing it, always facing it, that's the way to get through. Face it!
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Lifelessness is only a fašade concealing forms of life unknown to us.
(Bruno Schulz)

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Re: POETRY COMPETITION # 46
« Reply #9 on: April 01, 2011, 04:49:22 PM »
hoping to get involved in this one bar - good challenge  8)

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Re: POETRY COMPETITION # 46
« Reply #10 on: April 01, 2011, 05:03:46 PM »
am looking forward to, gloucester soul! best from bar
Facing it, always facing it, that's the way to get through. Face it!
(Joseph Conrad)
Lifelessness is only a fašade concealing forms of life unknown to us.
(Bruno Schulz)

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Re: POETRY COMPETITION # 46
« Reply #11 on: April 01, 2011, 05:29:37 PM »
Hey Bar,
thanks for the explanation. Again, new to this, so not a problem.

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Re: POETRY COMPETITION # 46
« Reply #12 on: April 01, 2011, 06:34:58 PM »
This is a sonnet I wrote last year for an essay that had to be a bout something that inspired us. I chose my frog filled, bug infested pond. I am new to this so all advice will be appreciated  :).

STORM

Silver crystal lake 'neath still moon nights,
Insects turning slowly in the breeze,
Rippled waters flow through lowly lights,
Shivering coldly, now with knocking knees.

A quickly felt stir near a long pond reed,
A pounce, a noise, silence once again,
Through gray and solemn clouds clear water bleeds,
Clear turned to dun across the dull terrain.

Bright light it filters through the 'wakened dawn,
Clouds depart from morn to hazy dusk,
As they return they come with silence torn,
Sharp bolts like arrows start a sorrowful task.

But as dawn nears a dismal wavy sea,
There is one place I'd rather not now be.
 :'( :'( :'(

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Re: POETRY COMPETITION # 46
« Reply #13 on: April 01, 2011, 06:39:03 PM »
wyv220!!!!! do you guys read? please post your Sonnet in Review My Poetry or Workshop, not in the Competition thread! you'll get all your chances to be appreciated if you post it in the right place!!!! I.e. create your own, new thread with "STORM" for its title, copy your poem into the body of the first thread's post! good luck...
Bar
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Facing it, always facing it, that's the way to get through. Face it!
(Joseph Conrad)
Lifelessness is only a fašade concealing forms of life unknown to us.
(Bruno Schulz)

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Re: POETRY COMPETITION # 46
« Reply #14 on: April 01, 2011, 06:58:57 PM »
Bar, buddy, calm down. You're screaming