Hello JaskaranRajput,
Well, after my last post, I was still intrigued by your premise and still thinking about how your story could be developed. So, keeping in mind that the market for such a script is obviously Bollywood, and Bollywood films like rags to riches stories, with a romance, lots of singing and dancing, and a big finale (usually a fancy wedding), I think that type of end product should be kept in mind when writing your script.
Here is my interpretation of how the story should go.
The store should start out with the scene in a small farming village. Ravi, his neighbor friend, and his friend's sister are playing together in the street. His friend's mother calls Ravi's friend and his sister in for dinner. When they part the sister looks longingly after Ravi, and the friend starts teasing his sister because she is in love with him. This establishes the basis of their future romance.
Ravi goes home, and overhears a rent collector threatening his mother with expulsion from their land. They are tenant farmers, and when their crops failed the previous year, Ravi's father went to Bombay to find a job and pay the rent so they wouldn't be thrown off their land.
The next scene shows Ravi and his mother finishing their dinner. Ravi tells his mother he overheard the rent collector and asked if they are really going to be thrown off their land. Ravi's mother says yes, but explains his father has gone to Bombay to earn enough money to pay the rent, but has not been heard from for many months. The mother starts coughing establishing that she is in ill health.
The next scene shows Ravi talking to his friend, and his friends sister. Ravi says is going to Bombay to find his father and tell him what is happening and that he should come home and pay the rent. The friend says he will go with Ravi,you and they plan to meet later in the night to depart. The sister advises against their trip, but agrees to say nothing.
The next several scenes cover their trip to Bombay and the adventures they have. The adventures should be humorous, and some should be dangerous
When they arrive at Bombay there are several scenes as they search for Ravi's father. Finally, they discover Ravi's father has died, and Ravi vows to stay in Bombay and earn the money to pay the rent. The friend reluctantly returns home, and tells Ravi's mother what he is doing, but won't say exactly where Ravi is so the mother cannot find him.
Ravi finds a job with an impoverished business whose childless owner gradually adopts Ravi as his own son. Together, over the next several years, they build the business up until it is very successful. Ravi, growing up as a handsome young man, finally has enough money to go home and buy their land.
Arriving home, Ravi finds his mother has lost the land, and is extremely ill. She has been taken in by the neighbor and is being cared for by the sister, now grown up to be a beautiful woman. Ravi buys their previous land and another adjoining farm and brings the deeds to his mother. The mother is extremely happy, but extremely ill and at death's door. With the excitement of seeing Ravi again, and regaining the land, Ravi's mother dies. As she dies, she extracts a promise from Ravi and the sister that they will marry and live on the land as she and her husband did, when they were young and just married. Ravi and the sister agree because it is obvious they have fallen in love.
There is a short scene showing the cremation of Ravi's mother, and the affection Ravi in the sister have for each other.
The neighbors are happy to have handsome Ravi as a son-in-law, and begin planning their wedding.
The wedding is lavish for a small village and there is much singing, dancing, and rejoicing.
A final scene shows Ravi and his wife with a young child on their land bringing in a bountiful crop.
This type of story allows lots of room for the typical Bollywood musical interludes.
If I knew anything at all about India, and the Indian people and locations, I'd be tempted to write this myself. But since I don't, please use it as a suggestion for the type of story you could write, and maybe even sell.
Another afterthought. I think this story should be placed before World War I, when I believe life in India was reasonably peaceful. For a little historical accuracy, you could do a little research and find a time when crops did fail, to provide some historical basis for the story. Other then during the adventures of the boys traveling to Bombay, I would leave out references to the British because it really adds nothing to the story.
Tony
