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Offline Milysmic

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Angel baby
« on: July 20, 2006, 05:09:22 PM »
 I'm not a poet but I wrote this years ago and thought I'd put it up here and see what you thought.

                       Angel Baby
 You came from Heaven through love and passion
 You laid in my tummy, I was suprised it happened
 I was a little scared to be your mom
 But i grew excited to love you
 To sing you songs
 Then god decided different a week after seven
 Decided it was best if you went back to heaven
 My heart is hurt
 The tears are heavy
 I'm sorry I lost you
 My Angel Baby
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Offline CarrieSheppard

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Re: Angel baby
« Reply #1 on: July 21, 2006, 04:42:15 AM »
Hiya

Poetic form criticism isn't really appropriate - this is an expression of emotion and as such is perfect in itself. Sometimes just to write things down, to express deep emotion is cathartic in itself.  Whether it's poetry or not depends on whether you want to share the experience (and in so doing offer understanding to others or an appeal for understanding accordingly).

What you could do is try writing some more poetry, play with the form, and if you enjoy it, carry on.

Carrie