It makes me want to read more, Foxy The only change I can suggest is a slight change of punctuation:His oversized ears, eyes, and shiny red nose were nothing unusual either. But, one thing about Geno made him different to his neighbours: for a cartoon he could be a real bastard.
The dim light in the restaurant gave my date a mystical, smoky look. I could see the waiter bringing my peppered steak when someone shot me. Shame, I was really hungry.
It was the day my grandmother exploded.
I sat in the crematorium, listening to my Uncle Hamish quietly snoring in harmony to Bach's Mass in B Minor, and I reflected that it always seemed to be death that drew me back to Gallanach
Things started to go wrong for me when I locked Katy Marks in my office for 3 hours.
I like yours too, it's got a lot of pop.
The dim light in the restaurant gave my date a mystical, smoky look. I could see the waiter bringing my peppered steak when someone shot me. Shame, I was really hungry. If I hadn't reached for another piece of bread, my brains would've ruined her Couture dress
Like moss covering the scattered bones of long-dead corpses, my father’s death settled over me. No more abusive outbursts, no more drunken ravings. Just a blessed end to the social incontinence by which this man, once the heroic measure by which I judged all men, had come to be known.
