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Sticky: Prize Sonnet-Writing Contest: The Winners!
« on: July 08, 2010, 04:57:31 AM »
I am pleased to be able to announce the winners of the myWritersCircle Prize Sonnet Contest.

The standard of entries was impressively high, but the judges (Amie Saramelkonian and Mark Hoffmann) were unanimous in their choice of winner. Many congratulations, then, to Jayne Osborn ('414jlo'), whose first prize winning sonnet is reproduced below...

The Rendezvous

First time: What preconceptions of this tryst?
- A nice hotel for lunch, a cosy chat?
(In her naïvety, no more than that.)
She met him; God, no way could she resist
from yielding to temptation once they’d kissed!
They ate, the urge increasing while they sat,
beyond the reach of any thermostat,
both knowing that this hunger would persist.

The bedroom: First, they shut the world outside,
then talked and laughed a while, and drank champagne.
They made love with intensity; both tried
to rationalise it – neither could explain.
They left the hotel, sad but satisfied,
each wondering if they’d get the chance again.

The judges comments about this poem were as follows: 'Best fit to the form, and most natural use of language. Pleasing rhythm and sonics, good use of occasional enjambment, good pace.'

Congratulations again to Jayne, who wins her choice of any of my WCCL writing courses, as set out in my blog post.

Our runner-up was MWC regular Eric Biggs ('Eric'). Here is his poem...

Dad's First Moonlighting

My father worked on steel-bound railroad trains
where engines brought their solid cars to sight
and hobos eating tin-can stew from drains
looked up to see them blare beyond the night.

Dad loved to make the Ninety-Nine go roll,
to cut the dark and outline all the trees
in silver mist and vibes of burning coal,
the fuel he shoveled high up as his knees.

Yet grandpa wanted dad to quit the train
to set line type with inky thumbs of blue.
So dad tried both, the road and news again -
the demon came and left off from his crew.

But when dad started work at grandpa's press,
a stroke soon killed him from the add-on stress

The judges said about this, 'Most original subject matter of the entries received. Strains a bit in terms of wording, but conveys some clear imagery that is appropriate to the theme.'

Eric wins a copy of The Poetry Dictionary by John Drury, a reference guide for poets and aspiring poets, published by Writers Digest Books. I will be sending this to Eric directly, through the good offices of Amazon.com.

Finally, our third prize winner was Valerie Albrighton ('Valerie'). Her sonnet is reproduced below...

Coach

Red poppies in profusion blotched the fringe
Of paths that led through golding fields of wheat;
Beneath blue skies and yellow sun's fierce singe
Grasshoppers sang in dusty August heat.
One evening in a shaded sandy lane
You taught me how to mount and ride a bike -
A skill you'd mastered long since with no pain
But which my parents thought unladylike.
Freed from restraint, I sped down country hills
To labour up the tedious balancing slope;
As outrider you guarded me from spills
Or dropped behind to let the traffic cope.
Without you I would not have dared to try;
With your lifelong encouragement, I fly.

The judges said: 'Good fit to form, imagery and theme with broad appeal, and no obvious straining.'

Valerie wins a copy of the MWC Winter of Our Mixed Content anthology, packed with great writing by myWritersCircle members.

Many congratulations to all our winners, and commiserations to those who didn't quite make the winners' rostrum this time. I hope you enjoyed the challenge anyway, and that it may have (re)ignited your interest in creating poems in this traditional form.

Many thanks also to our judges, Amie and Mark, and to MWC moderator Don, who handled the administration of the contest with admirable efficiency.

Watch out for more prize contests on myWritersCircle before too long!

Nick  :)
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Re: Sticky: Prize Sonnet-Writing Contest: The Winners!
« Reply #1 on: July 09, 2010, 03:39:16 PM »
Congratulations to all three   ;D
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Re: Sticky: Prize Sonnet-Writing Contest: The Winners!
« Reply #2 on: July 09, 2010, 05:51:08 PM »
congrats to all winners and entrants alike.
i admire those who can write poetry.  such a high form of art.

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Re: Sticky: Prize Sonnet-Writing Contest: The Winners!
« Reply #3 on: July 11, 2010, 01:45:21 PM »
I'm delighted to have won the sonnet competition; many thanks to the judges, and to others for their kind remarks.
I'm new to this site, though not to Nick's newsletter which I've been receiving for ages.
I hope to get to know the place better now, - and also you lovely writers out there!
All the best,
Jayne

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Re: Sticky: Prize Sonnet-Writing Contest: The Winners!
« Reply #4 on: July 11, 2010, 01:54:22 PM »
Very well deserved win on your part.  I am sure you'll be a credit to this site.  One suggestion, go to the Welcome Board (at the top of the front page index) to say hi and the moderators as well as a few members will welcome you with a few items of interest and hints.

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Re: Sticky: Prize Sonnet-Writing Contest: The Winners!
« Reply #5 on: July 12, 2010, 06:03:51 PM »
my respect to the winners. well done. i tried to write one but i wasn't even in the same league. 8)

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Re: Sticky: Prize Sonnet-Writing Contest: The Winners!
« Reply #6 on: July 12, 2010, 06:06:43 PM »
Congratulations, all three of you.

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Re: Sticky: Prize Sonnet-Writing Contest: The Winners!
« Reply #7 on: July 20, 2010, 12:55:45 PM »
Congratulations for being the best.  Well deserved.
I tried one myself and will strive to reach your level of excellence.  Well done
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Re: Sticky: Prize Sonnet-Writing Contest: The Winners!
« Reply #8 on: September 13, 2010, 01:59:16 PM »
 :)Congratulations!
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Re: Sticky: Prize Sonnet-Writing Contest: The Winners!
« Reply #9 on: September 24, 2010, 06:27:54 AM »
All three are different and so lovely! warm congratulations to you
Jayne (your sonnet is brilliant! the old theme wonderfully refreshed in the breeze of your talent!),
eric (your casual unaffected voice makes your sonnet poignant!) and
Valerie (it's beautiful enough to express gratitude, but when it naturally wears a vesture of a sonnet, it's simply disarming...)

Thanks to all

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Re: Sticky: Prize Sonnet-Writing Contest: The Winners!
« Reply #10 on: September 24, 2010, 04:22:38 PM »
 :) Congratulations!
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Re: Sticky: Prize Sonnet-Writing Contest: The Winners!
« Reply #11 on: November 29, 2010, 06:29:20 PM »
Well done to all. I enjoyed reading these :)