Author Topic: The Second Killing: Outside The Hub, Penn State  (Read 1441 times)

Offline actpoet1

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The Second Killing: Outside The Hub, Penn State
« on: June 20, 2006, 06:37:58 PM »
Tanning freshmen like exclamation points
on their towels. Their dance shoes and childhood full dresses
like family secrets protected inside their parentsí attics. I close my eyes.
See Autumnís shoes and full dresses protected
inside my attic, but

my eyes open. I kill her again.

I turn with glazed over eyes: the desire
to be needed and loved
has pressed those girlsí shoes into sandals;
full dresses into two-piece bathing suits.

I pick up my pen and pad, then grin
knowing that whatís between their thighs,
a cave protecting their secrets,
      is as powerful as
      a razor blade
ripped straight down a wrist.

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Offline caliban1

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Re: The Second Killing: Outside The Hub, Penn State
« Reply #1 on: June 22, 2006, 12:29:30 AM »
Well, Act, another really powerful straight to the gut poem.  The imagery in the last stanza was a staggering.  It made me sit up in my chair.  Well done.  No suggestions at this point.  It is good. Is this part of a cycle of poems?

Cal
It is all a metaphor.