Author Topic: In His Footsteps  (Read 1584 times)

Offline mickward

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In His Footsteps
« on: June 17, 2006, 04:08:44 AM »

I remember him
A giant, strong in arm and soul,
Afraid of nothing but fear itself,
Always ready for the next challenge.

Now I don't know him
A shadow of a distant memory,
Weak in spirit, weak in health,
Scared of what tomorrow might bring

I see in him myself
And I shiver in apprehension,
For I will surely follow his steps,
And be destined to become my father.

Mick Ward © 2006



Offline Writers Block

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Re: In His Footsteps
« Reply #1 on: June 18, 2006, 05:19:50 PM »
I like this,  I really got the 'feel' of the fear.  Fisrt two verses are great contrast and lead into the third verse very well.
I tend to critique in a harsh manner. Please remember it is not personal, but how I prefer anyone critiqueing me to be. It is far more useful IMO.

WB

Do unto others as you would have them do unto you.

Offline mickward

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Re: In His Footsteps
« Reply #2 on: June 19, 2006, 03:29:19 AM »
Hi Writers Block,

  Thank you, I'm glad you liked it.
 
  Mick Ward

Offline Raphael

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Re: In His Footsteps
« Reply #3 on: June 21, 2006, 12:45:02 AM »
A Newbie here.

 I like the respect and admiration you profess. But as death calls it brings the greatest humbling. I see two men holding on to life. Thank you for this insight…


Raphael