Author Topic: A Perfect Day  (Read 1250 times)

Offline souldesire

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A Perfect Day
« on: March 14, 2010, 05:16:57 AM »
Hi,
I'm a bit nervous as its the first time ive posted any work on here. I would gladly welcome any help/advice/feedabck for this story. Especially concerning structure, narrative, point of view etc




 

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Re: A Perfect Day
« Reply #1 on: March 14, 2010, 05:31:29 AM »
If you would like a critique on this please send me a PM and I will provide my new e-mail address for you to send it in a proper format.


I liked the sound of the story!


Lin x

Offline souldesire

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Re: A Perfect Day
« Reply #2 on: March 14, 2010, 05:40:43 AM »
Hi,

Ive tried sending you a PM. Not sure if you got it though! Shall I try cut and pasting this story instead?

Thanks for the reply.

Offline moosprojects

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Re: A Perfect Day
« Reply #3 on: March 26, 2010, 06:28:36 PM »
I have just joined the writers circle and yours was the first story I have read.I live in Rural Andalucia and have four ex strays. It is estimated that some 80,000 dogs live wild in this part of Spain. I can't comment on your style as I am only just starting out myself,but I could feel the strong emotions behind it. That to me is most important in any tale.   onward and upward    john

Lin

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Re: A Perfect Day
« Reply #4 on: March 27, 2010, 05:07:32 AM »
Send me an e-mail that should work.

Lin x

Offline mcseveny

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Re: A Perfect Day
« Reply #5 on: March 28, 2010, 08:20:18 AM »
My first read on here and I enjoyed it. I think there was some brave writing in there.