biography

[twisted wheel]

the bleached spine
hides its name

and stains
discolour
its image


the pages
are torn
creased
and thumbed

from over-use
and abuse


now
it gathers
dust

and waits
to be
recycled

[Biola]

Wow! Daryl,
Had to read quickly a second time before the penny dropped that it was about a book. Good poem Daryl, very nice and paints a picture of a much loved, used, and abused book that  now is ready to be used again in another way when recycled. Learnt a lot from it and it gave me a deeper meaning. For life, love and things can follow that same cycle. Thanks a lot. Gave me food for thought and it was still simple and beautiful.
biola

[Vienna]

Daryl mate you did it again! A master of the short sharp verse.

[Gyppo]

I'm not going to analyse it.  I just like it.  First impression was good and now, reading it again after a few hours, I still like it.

Gyppo

[CCRP]

Good one, Daryl.

I love the irony in it.

[twisted wheel]

thanks biola, vienna, gyppo and nel.

[Bobby]

Loved it. That's all.

[DIZI]

Add me to the like it very much list.
Well done.

[twisted wheel]

thanks bobby and dizi

[Mark H]

Daryl

IMO it is good, but not finished. Some things to think about.

1) You are mixing the metaphor in with the thing it's representing, e.g. name/title. Not good.

2) "Hides" I think is the wrong word because it suggest being covered or out of sight. If the spine hid the name, what impact would bleaching it have?

3) As with name/title, I feel something wrong with "image".

Mark

[twisted wheel]

thanks mark - sensible suggestions for me to look into. 

[drab]

Hi Daryl,
Must confess on first reading I immediately thought of an old girlie magazine, (no, not one full of naked elderly ladies) 'thumbed, over-use and abuse' were the key words my dirty mind latched onto. The owner, now too old to enjoy it, watches it and himself fade with time.
It appeals to us on many levels (mine being the lowest) and really is a wonderful piece.
Well done.
drab

[Alice, a Country Gal]

Daryl, you could have been talking about the first full sized dictionary I ever bought for myself - except for the ending. I doubt I'll ever give it up for the recycle bin.

Thanks for an enjoyable poem.