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Offline cruising granny

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Bush Vanity
« on: February 16, 2010, 05:01:43 AM »
I write about Australian real life.  Here's an example.  Enjoy   8)

BUSH VANITY ©
By Christine Thiel

The bush is no place for vanity.
If you stress, it could cost your sanity.
The heat, sweat, dust and flies
Will smudge mascara into eyes.

Nature and wildlife donít care about lippy,
And without it you wonít go dippy.
The grime clings to foundation,
But thatís life out on a Kimberley cattle station.

Thereís an extreme from coastal city lifestyle
To the inland rural domicile.
The anonymous hustle, bustle of suburban dwellers,
Generates smiles on faces of country girls and fellas.

The sophisticated fashionable dress sense
Would be a hazard on a barbed wire fence.
Stilletto heels, and torturous shoes,
Not as sensible as RMís, Rossiís or denim blues.

Beautifully groomed or blow-dried hairstyle
With highlights and tinting, bring satisfied smiles.
But a wide-brimmed Akubra hat
Covers, and soon puts an end to all that.

Neatly manicured nails and pedicured feet
Ensure the overall appearance remains neat.
Inside Explorer sox and hardy footwear
Those witnessing this scene remain unaware Ė

Of the effort it took to look so groomed,
To grab attention when entering a room.
Out in the bush appearance begins
With how hard you work, and the attitude within.
I'm not retired, I'm on a lifestyle.

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Re: Bush Vanity
« Reply #1 on: February 16, 2010, 05:15:13 AM »
Hiya Christine, welcome :) - cool user name ;D

From the copyright symbol and your preceding comments, I'm guessing that you aren't looking for critique on this piece. Shall I move it to the Gallery for you? (this review board is for critique rather than sharing of finished pieces)
"You do not need to leave your room. Remain sitting at your table and listen. Do not even listen, simply wait, be quiet still and solitary. The world will freely offer itself to you to be unmasked, it has no choice, it will roll in ecstasy at your feet." - Kafka

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Re: Bush Vanity
« Reply #2 on: February 16, 2010, 06:01:18 AM »
do we really need to use a copyright symbol here!?
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Re: Bush Vanity
« Reply #3 on: February 16, 2010, 06:05:53 AM »
do we really need to use a copyright symbol here!?

Nope, totally unnecessary. You own the copyright as soon as you write the thing, symbol or no. And I'm told by people who know more about this than I do (ie people who review stuff for publication) that it looks amateurish (sorry cruising granny - I've heard that from a few different people now, and it's just as well to be aware if you do intend to submit your work for publication)
"You do not need to leave your room. Remain sitting at your table and listen. Do not even listen, simply wait, be quiet still and solitary. The world will freely offer itself to you to be unmasked, it has no choice, it will roll in ecstasy at your feet." - Kafka

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Re: Bush Vanity
« Reply #4 on: February 16, 2010, 06:11:23 AM »
thanks amie for confirming what I have also been told, here and by others.

cheers
richard
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Re: Bush Vanity
« Reply #5 on: February 17, 2010, 05:06:36 AM »
Hiya Christine, welcome :) - cool user name ;D

From the copyright symbol and your preceding comments, I'm guessing that you aren't looking for critique on this piece. Shall I move it to the Gallery for you? (this review board is for critique rather than sharing of finished pieces)

That sounds like a good idea.
The copyright symbol is a habit.  I know it's not necessary, so I'll remove it from future pieces.
I'm new here and didn't know what was acceptable.  Better to be on the safe side.
I've been a "freelance" too long.  Cheers
« Last Edit: February 17, 2010, 05:09:37 AM by cruising granny »
I'm not retired, I'm on a lifestyle.

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Re: Bush Vanity
« Reply #6 on: February 17, 2010, 08:43:54 PM »
I look forward to seeing your Australian life work, cruising granny
Smoke me a clipper, I'll be back for Christmas!
- A. J. Rimmer, Red Dwarf