Author Topic: Betrothed  (Read 1611 times)

vmarspi

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Betrothed
« on: January 13, 2010, 11:08:49 PM »

FADE IN:
INT. ADDY'S LOFT -- AFTERNOON
A floor to ceiling window stretching across the wall reveals
a foggy New York skyline.
The apartment is immaculately clean and organized.
Suitcases are stacked near the door.
On the kitchen counter, the New York Times is open to the
fiction book bestsellers list: #2 is Marry Times by Addy
Solinger.
The living room is replaced by an office area. ADDY SOLINGER,
27, a "girl next door" type, sits in front of a computer
typing feverishly. Stacks of papers and notebooks are laying
on a table, and shelves full of books are along the wall.
The trash can is full of crumpled up pieces of paper.
A stack of novels is next to the computer. All by Addison
Solinger, the spines reveal the titles are: Romance Abroad,
Love Lost, Love Found, White Night, and the top book is
flipped over the show a picture of Addy Solinger on the back
cover under "About the Author."
The computer is equipped with a webcam. Addy is smiling and
laughing as she clicks the mouse. A slideshow of pictures
show Addy and a boy posing and embracing at various New York
landmarks (Statue of Liberty, Empire State Building, Broadway
show, Knicks game, etc).
A KNOCK at the door.
FRANKLIN (O.S.)
Ms. Solinger, you're taxi is here.
Addy rushes to the door, grabs her purse, and exits the
apartment.
EXT. GRAVEYARD -- SUNSET
A taxi pulls up as Addy gets out. She motions to the cab
driver to wait there.
Two headstones close together are inscribed "Parker and
Kristen Solinger. Loving Parents and Friends." Both died
on May 3, 2000.
Addy walks up and lays tulips in a vase between the two
headstones. She kneels down in front of the graves.
ADDY
Hey guys. Did you hear my book was
number two on the New York Times
Bestsellers? I know it's crazy.
(MORE)
2.
ADDY (CONT'D)
My editor wants a draft for another
novel already. I told him I was
going to the mountains to focus on
work, draw inspiration, but I need a
vacation don't you think?
Karl, late 60's, appears behind Addy in a groundkeepers
uniform.
KARL
Addy? It's that you?
Addy rises as she turns around.
ADDY
Karl. How are you? Still working
hard it looks like.
KARL
Yeah. Not as hard as you though. I
read your newest book.
ADDY
Thanks. How's Selena and the kids?
KARL
They're great. Carly just got
engaged. Have you found that special
someone yet?
ADDY
Speaking of, do you think you can
replace the flowers every couple of
weeks? I'm going away for a little
while.
KARL
Sure. Is everything alright?
ADDY
Everything's great. I'm visiting
this guy.
KARL
Is he a special friend? You write
about love and romance so much I was
wondering when art would imitate
life.
ADDY
Cute. Yes. We're dating.
KARL
You don't say. What's his name?
Anyone I would know?
3.
ADDY
No. We've been talking online for
almost six months now. This will be
the first time I've visited him at
home. He's been here a couple times
though.
KARL
And I didn't meet him?
ADDY
Sorry, but a graveyard. Not very
romantic.
KARL
Addy, I'm happy for you. Is it
serious?
ADDY
Well. I don't know. Maybe. I hope
so. He's really great.
KARL
A little flustered are we?
ADDY
Whatever.
KARL
I'm just messing with you. It's
great that you found someone. You
spend too much time working and not
enough on yourself.
ADDY
That's what I've been telling myself.
Carpe diem you know. I have writer's
block anyway.
Addy looks down at her watch.
ADDY (CONT'D)
Oh, I'm gonna miss my flight.
KARL
You better hurry then. Take care,
Addy.
ADDY
Thanks.
Addy turns to leave and leans in towards her parents' graves.
ADDY (CONT'D)
I'll see you guys soon. Love you.
See you, Karl.
4.
INT. RENTAL CAR STORE -- MORNING
Airplanes can be seen taking off and landing out of the window
in the distance.
Addy enters grinning with luggage in tow.
BROCK, 21, wearing a work shirt, name tag, and slacks stands
behind the counter.
Addy walks right to the counter.
Brock is reading a Playboy magazine.
ADDY
Excuse me.
Brock quickly closes up the magazine, throws it under the
computer, and adjusts his name tag.
BROCK
Hello. Welcome to St. Louis,
Missouri. Here at Exchange-A-Car we
strive to meet your driving needs.
One swipe of your credit card and
fun for miles. How can I help you?
ADDY
Nice spiel. I'll take anything,
preferably a small car. I'm driving
out in the country. Meeting my
boyfriend...well kind of we've met
online.
BROCK
That's nice. Let me check the
computer.
Brock turns and types on the computer.
ADDY
Sure. Thanks. I'm nervous if you
can't tell.
BROCK
So...look's like I have a Toyota
Camry. Color red.
ADDY
That sounds great. I'll take it.
BROCK
I just need your license and a credit
card.
ADDY
Of course.
5.
Addy digs through her purse. She begins pulling random
objects and trash out and setting it on the counter.
ADDY (CONT'D)
My wallet's in here somewhere.
BROCK
Take your time. I've got nowhere to
be.
Addy looks up then goes back to searching for her wallet.
ADDY
Here it is.
Addy hands her cards over to Brock.
BROCK
Thanks. One moment.
KONRAD VILLIERS, 27, rushes through the door behind Addy.
His appearance is clean cut: khakis, slicked back hair, and
a polo shirt showing off his physique.
KONRAD
Addison. Addy.
Addy spins around and runs into Konrad's arms.
ADDY
What are you doing here? I was gonna
drive-
KONRAD
I know, but I thought I'd surprise
you instead. What do you need a car
for anyway?
Addy grabs her luggage and begins walking to the door arm in
arm with Konrad.
BROCK
Excuse me, miss.
Addy turns around smiling and laughing.
ADDY
Yes.
BROCK
Your cards.
ADDY
Oh, right.
EXT. RENTAL CAR STORE -- CONTINUOUS
A run down red Chevy pickup truck sits beside the curb.
6.
Konrad walks past the car as Addy follows behind.
KONRAD
This is us.
Addy looks at the truck then turns to go back to the passenger
side.
KONRAD (CONT'D)
Used to be my dad's.
ADDY
Oh.
KONRAD
Let me get those for you.
Konrad gently sets her luggage in the bed of the truck.
He opens the door for her.
She climbs into the passenger side.
« Last Edit: January 14, 2010, 10:58:01 AM by vmarspi »

Offline PretzelGirl

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Re: Betrothed
« Reply #1 on: January 13, 2010, 11:46:39 PM »
 :o this is 79 pages long, and you've got a 2000-word prose up for critique too.

I suggest reading some of the stickies and introducing yourself first.
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