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Offline Geraldine

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Daily mantra
« on: October 07, 2009, 03:57:31 AM »
Comments welcome and appreciated  :)

Daily mantra

What is the question.

Rarely I get and answer
from my failing memory.
maybe I am dying,

this time.
« Last Edit: October 07, 2009, 03:59:13 AM by Geraldine »
love in death shows what love in life should be

Offline eric

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Re: Daily mantra
« Reply #1 on: October 07, 2009, 01:34:52 PM »
um, interesting angle but i don't like this one very much at all.  it's too self-indulgent and does not pay especially close attention to logic, either the intellectual kind or the emotional kind.  you have done quite a bit better lately.  pay attention to your images.  keep at it!

Offline Geraldine

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Re: Daily mantra
« Reply #2 on: October 07, 2009, 01:53:32 PM »
Hi Eric,

cool, nuff said, i think this one made more sense inside my head than on a page, just thought i'd throw it out there in case it was one of those ones that was better than i thought it was, cant blame a girl for trying in these turbulant waters, lol!

Tho i have had a lil time during the course of the day and i may have a lil rework that may make it more clear, if its good enough i'll post a revision, will let it swill for another lil wile first tho, haha im learning the art of patience where reworks are concerned!

thanks again. (smile)
love in death shows what love in life should be

Offline eric

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Re: Daily mantra
« Reply #3 on: October 07, 2009, 02:57:23 PM »
good for you, G.