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Victor
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frustration (profanity)
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August 17, 2009, 10:18:06 AM »
Removed due to language and lack of any poetic worth.
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Last Edit: October 29, 2013, 01:11:58 PM by Alice, a Country Gal
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And I gave my heart to know wisdom, and to know madness and folly: I perceived that this also is vexation of spirit. -ECCLESIASTES 1:17
Mark H
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August 17, 2009, 10:44:54 AM »
I'm not a big fan of rhyming poetry but this works well.
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eric
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August 17, 2009, 10:46:20 AM »
heh heh Mark.
last line seems a bit telly to me ...
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Victor
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August 17, 2009, 10:56:52 AM »
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last line seems a bit telly to me ...
perhaps, should I change it to 'a mound of smouldering turd' ?
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eric
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August 17, 2009, 10:58:36 AM »
turd seems a little telly to me ...
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Victor
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August 17, 2009, 11:36:08 AM »
maybe I should engage all the five senses ?
sight, smell, touch, sound........and......err...........taste.?
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Akeith (Gray)
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August 17, 2009, 12:16:05 PM »
This is funny. I'd leave out "taste" but that's just me.
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eric
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August 17, 2009, 12:18:49 PM »
taste. interesting ... but "eat shit, eric" would still be a little telly, don't you think? heh heh. very good job.
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Victor
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August 18, 2009, 11:00:40 AM »
thanks gray....
eric...thank you, too....don't ask me 'for what' ?
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eric
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August 18, 2009, 11:03:01 AM »
you better thank Mark or he'll pout
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Victor
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August 18, 2009, 11:06:35 AM »
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you better thank Mark
or he'll pout
that second clause scares me....so yeah, thank you too, Mark
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Mark H
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August 18, 2009, 12:41:10 PM »
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you better thank Mark or he'll pout
or worse ... weave you into a story, a horror story, a story where you get turned into a 40 something housewife with varicose veins.
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and
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If poetry is not your thing:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PueM04F0Qz8
or:
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Sleepy Sally
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Re: frustration
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August 22, 2009, 07:16:04 AM »
All poetry when so straight foward like this, sounds cool when it's short.
So this is pretty perfect, and all thanks to two types of curse words... I ddn't even know this was possible lol
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Jade
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August 22, 2009, 09:22:56 AM »
Laughing myself into a frenzy..
Whahaha
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Victor
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August 22, 2009, 11:56:57 AM »
thanks for the comments, Acquaria and Jade.
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