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Offline eric

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« on: August 16, 2009, 10:51:38 PM »
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Offline Mark H

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Re: Terminate the Thing
« Reply #1 on: August 18, 2009, 02:19:58 PM »
It's bleak and sour and flavoured with self pity. If it's written by a happy guy using his writing skills to bring those emotions to life then that's fine -- although I suspect there's a limited readership for bleak.

On the other hand, if you are writing about how you feel, then I'm sorry to hear it.

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Re: Terminate the Thing
« Reply #2 on: August 18, 2009, 07:17:04 PM »
I am happy, just so you know, just mucking around in the shit.  This is my emo poem, trying it out to see what it's like.  Really don't like the self-pity part too, probably did better in the first, way different version of this when I was a teenager.  I am bored with it, think I'll can it.

Thank you for your informative review.  And thank the other persons also.
« Last Edit: August 18, 2009, 07:23:03 PM by eric »