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Offline takeovertarget

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Women and Hair
« on: May 13, 2006, 04:11:40 PM »
Does this work for anyone????


HAIR

Age aproaches , the hair grows grey
its starts to thin, panic right away.
Hair, Hair,


But worse can come if you succum
to cancer and the treatment
for chemo kills all living hair
before you know, there’s no more there.
Hair, Hair,

Panic, hurt, anger, fear
We lose our only outward cheer
how can a woman look her best
when all her hair is but a test
of who she is and what she does
of how she feels about ideals
Hair, Hair,

There are those who try the scarves,
their faces shine it suits them,
others give wigs a try
scratching when the weather’s dry
all for hair to be not shy
Hair, Hair,

At last that’s it! No more scarves,
no more wigs, to hell with hair
this is freedom my liberty
I go out now, without my hair
This is ME whatever you dare
I save the money, the worry the care
Do I really need the hair?
Hair, Hair,

I strut about and want to shout
no gel, no mousse, no spray, no fees
no tips, no pain, not thank you Jane
for what is hair but dead old cells
I’m bald and clean, the hairless queen!
No hair, No hair,








"The journey of a thousand miles begins with a single step"  Lao-tse

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Re: Women and Hair
« Reply #1 on: May 13, 2006, 11:42:24 PM »
Hi Lucy,

I really liked your poem - a light-hearted look at a very emotionally and physically devastating problem for some.  However, that's only MY perspective and would like to hear how someone who has really lost their hair would perceive it.  I personally enjoyed it.  --Carol

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Re: Women and Hair
« Reply #2 on: May 14, 2006, 01:09:32 AM »
Hi Carol thanks for your vote of confidence.   I did lose my hair through chemotherpay early last year and went exactly through that senario.  I got got fed up with wigs and scarves but it has grown back now and  I'm back into the usual hair routine once again ,  Lucy ;D
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Re: Women and Hair
« Reply #3 on: May 14, 2006, 03:14:25 AM »
Well as this is a poem about a personal situation I dare not tread or alter anything as it is so personal and I did feel that making changes were not absolutely necessary as this poem was written to give others in the same situation as yourself some hope for the future.

Well done, Im all for anyone who dares to write about how they have peeled off all inhibitions of being different!!   I'm so glad you are getting better and that's the main thing just now.

Take great care of yourself and enjoy the extra time you have been given - my mother in law fell ill some 20 years ago and now she is 81.   An extra 20 years of life in return for suffering some hair loss I think is quite a record and worth every moment.

Great, loved it

Lin
« Last Edit: May 15, 2006, 04:23:16 AM by Lin »

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Re: Women and Hair
« Reply #4 on: May 15, 2006, 12:23:33 AM »
Thank you Lin. And thanks for telling me about you Mother-in-Law.  yes, there are many stories like that, aren't there.  Lucy :)
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Re: Women and Hair
« Reply #5 on: May 15, 2006, 12:42:38 AM »
Lucy,
What empresses me, is your inspiring attitude and the spirit in which you have faced the monster. It’s a pleasure to get to know you and share in your life. ~ Sherry

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« Reply #6 on: May 15, 2006, 01:41:02 AM »
Thank you for your kind words Sherry and I'm very glad to get to know you too. Lucy  :)
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Re: Women and Hair
« Reply #7 on: May 15, 2006, 09:13:43 AM »
well, it was great, but would be better if you could hear the tune as well!

I liked the verses much better when the rhymes and rythms came together; when they didn't it wasn't so easy to read because the mind was already expecting a certain metre etc.

Great walking and dishwashing song I suspect!!

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Re: Women and Hair
« Reply #8 on: May 15, 2006, 10:09:50 AM »
Thanks Tharpa - It needs some work to get the rhythm so any ideas are welcome
Lucy ;D
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Re: Women and Hair
« Reply #9 on: May 15, 2006, 11:07:57 AM »
HAIR

Age approaches, hair grows grey
it starts to thin, I panic away.
Hair, Hair…


But worse can come if you succumb
going under the cancer treatment's thumb
for chemo kills all living hair,
before you know, there’s no more there.
Hair, Hair…

Panic, hurt, anger, fear
We lose our only outward cheer
how can a woman look her best
when all her hair is but a test
of who she is and what she does
of how she feels about ideals.
Hair, Hair…

There are those who try the scarves,
their faces shine, it suits them;
others then give wigs a try
scratching when the weather’s dry
all for hair to be not shy
Hair, Hair…

At last that’s it! Now no more scarves,
no more wigs, to hell with hair!
This is freedom, liberty
I go out now, without my hair.
This is ME whatever you dare
I save the money the worry the care
Do I really need the hair?
Hair, Hair…

I strut about and want to shout
no gel, no mousse, no spray, no fees
no tips, no pain, no thank you Jane
for what is hair but dead old cells
I’m bald and clean, the hairless queen!
No hair, No hair…
« Last Edit: May 15, 2006, 11:10:53 AM by tharpa »

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Re: Women and Hair
« Reply #10 on: May 15, 2006, 11:51:28 AM »
Hey Tharpa,  That sounds better !   I like the  thumb' bit  thanks.  Lucy ;D
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« Reply #11 on: May 15, 2006, 11:54:05 AM »
PS Maybe you should try submitting this to a greeting card company??

Igleli posted this in a 'publishing poetry' section in a different area...

glad you liked the changes... just playing around.....

http://www.writerswrite.com/journal/feb98/gak4.htm

« Last Edit: May 15, 2006, 11:56:36 AM by tharpa »

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Re: Women and Hair
« Reply #12 on: May 15, 2006, 01:58:10 PM »
Thanks for the website Tharpa!!!  I'll check it out.   ;D
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Re: Women and Hair
« Reply #13 on: July 12, 2006, 07:46:36 AM »
This is sweet! To the point, get it out there poem. It speaks for many woman. Great poem! Whether you have hair or not we are love anyway sharon