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Offline zhaniswolf

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Gentle Winter Death
« on: November 19, 2008, 02:57:18 PM »
Snow angels and laughter
Fading memories--like ghosts
From past to present
Hushed nature--flakes drifting down
Eyes opening; dull blue; closing again
Wrinkles--age has done its job
Last breath
Gone with the birth of a white blanket

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NOTE:  One of my favorite things to do when I write poetry is challenge myself.  One of my favorite challenges is writing a poem that has no repeating words in it.  Extra challenging is when the title is not composed of words that are in the poem.  This is one of the poems I came up with from that challenge and the prompt:  gone with the snow.  I hope you enjoy this piece, and feel free to comment--good or bad.
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Would love to get published someday.

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Re: Gentle Winter Death
« Reply #1 on: November 19, 2008, 08:03:29 PM »
Hi ZWolf. There are several around here more knowledgable than me, especially when it comes to writing or critiquing poetry.

But I wanted to let you know I enjoyed this. Thank you for posting it here.

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Re: Gentle Winter Death
« Reply #2 on: November 19, 2008, 08:38:09 PM »
Hi ZWolf. There are several around here more knowledgable than me, especially when it comes to writing or critiquing poetry.

But I wanted to let you know I enjoyed this. Thank you for posting it here.

Smiles,


I don't care about knowlegable critiques as much as I do opinions.  I'm glad you enjoyed this.  I enjoyed writing it.
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Would love to get published someday.

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Re: Gentle Winter Death
« Reply #3 on: November 19, 2008, 09:11:43 PM »
If you don't care about serious review, which you may get on this board, I suggest you post your poem in The Gallery which is a board right down there (pointing).  That's for people just to enjoy your postings without any substantial critiques, simply Oh that is nice, Nice read, I liked it, etc.
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Re: Gentle Winter Death
« Reply #4 on: November 19, 2008, 09:56:51 PM »
Hey I enjoyed this poem - it flowed well and i thought you did a good job with it
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