Author Topic: A little thing i wrote. No big deal, but i really liked it and figured i'd share  (Read 1494 times)

Offline Wicked Redhead

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JIM

He really does say all the right things.
I still try to steel my heart to him,
Hurt is my fear.
Yet he breaks down every barrier
with his sexy words and passionate kisses.
I find my dreams are being overrun by him.
My body yearns for his touch.
My soul craving his.
Ah, Jim.
His name makes my insides flutter
and my heart grows fonder at the thought
of him being in my life.
My Jim.
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ChristineK

Touching. I liked it.

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Offline Big T

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Hi Chris,
Nice read.
One comment:
The poem implies much more than 'fondness', I think the inclusion of 'fonder' actually weakens the rest. Find a stronger way to express it ... or remove it altogether.
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Okay. I'm not really a poetic person. Just picked up a pen and wrote this.
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