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Offline robertmblevins

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'Memoir' (flash fiction)
« on: May 25, 2008, 02:42:05 AM »
Memoir


Mrs. Sanders was crying again.

It had been another difficult afternoon for her at the hospital, and now she was sitting in the kitchen sobbing quietly.

Outside it was bright summer and warm.  A few songbirds chirped from the apple tree in the side yard and picked at the feeder.

Six-year-old Jenny wandered into the kitchen. “Mommy?”

Mrs. Sanders bravely tried to smile. “Yes, honey?”

“Can I play in the attic?”

“Sure, sweetheart.” It was perfectly safe in the attic and she knew Jenny loved exploring the books and chests. “Have fun.”

After Jenny bounced happily up the attic stairs, her mother took a notebook and began writing something in it.

Up in the attic, the little girl headed for her favorite box, the one with all the pictures. She struggled with a big photo album until it thumped heavily to the floor.  She flipped the pages.

Stopping at one particular photograph, she smiled and touched her head, remembering. “That’s when I had hair!” she said brightly to no one in particular.

Down in the kitchen, Mrs. Sanders had written the same phrase over and over in the notebook until the page was filled:

IT’S NOT FAIR.


The End

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Re: 'Memoir' (flash fiction)
« Reply #1 on: May 25, 2008, 03:23:53 AM »
Hi Robert

Yes, well done, you got the whole story across in very few words. very nice!

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Re: 'Memoir' (flash fiction)
« Reply #2 on: May 25, 2008, 04:53:05 AM »
Really clever. Well done mate. :)

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Re: 'Memoir' (flash fiction)
« Reply #3 on: May 25, 2008, 05:15:05 AM »
Kudos from me too!
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