Author Topic: The Wizard War (Chapters One to Eight)  (Read 19170 times)

davidleejones13

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Re: The Wizard War (Chapter Six)
« Reply #60 on: February 08, 2008, 12:37:33 AM »
Ma,
You know it was you. I love you so much I had to include you in a story.  ;D
Thank you so much for reading, I am glad you like the series. It was fun for me too.
I think I am going to take a break on this one so I can go and write the final episode of TOOTHIE.

Your friend,'
Lee

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Re: The Wizard War (Chapter Eight)
« Reply #61 on: February 08, 2008, 12:43:23 AM »
Shorter, still good.  but does 'EYE' have to be in all capitals?  it seems just a bit tacky, since it wasn't in all caps beforehand...
The greatest trick the devil ever pulled was convincing the world he didn't exist.

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davidleejones13

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Re: The Wizard War (Chapter Seven)
« Reply #62 on: February 08, 2008, 12:45:39 AM »
Thanks Mem,
Thanks Age,
nit pick all you want man. You can only make it better by your comments. That is the difference between constructive and destructive criticism. YOU are doing it without malica and only to help. You will not offend me, so have at it.
I am just thrilled you are reading it and keeping up with it.

Lee

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Re: The Wizard War (Chapter Eight)
« Reply #63 on: February 08, 2008, 12:48:22 AM »
Age,
Eye just changed it.  ;D
Keep me straight man. Thank you!

Lee

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Re: The Wizard War (Chapter Seven)
« Reply #64 on: February 08, 2008, 01:04:05 AM »
it's not much about offending, its more like

"OKAY lee, here we go...ya messed up THIS and this and put a coma here..."

I can be like an overbearing mother, if you prefer
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Re: The Wizard War (Chapter Eight)
« Reply #65 on: February 08, 2008, 01:07:45 AM »
...and now it seems that 'eye' should be capitalized ONCE, since you were using it as a proper noun before.

The Dragon Mother's Eye.

Just not all caps.





you ASKED for it, sir.
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Re: The Wizard War (Chapters One to Eight)
« Reply #66 on: February 08, 2008, 08:56:57 AM »
I apologise for the temporary absence of these wizard war threads. They were pushing everyone else off the front page so, with Lee's agreement, I've consolidated the bulk of them into this single thread. Sorry for any inconvenience caused.

Paul

davidleejones13

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Re: The Wizard War (Chapters One to Eight)
« Reply #67 on: February 08, 2008, 09:28:41 AM »
Age,
I gotta have someone keep me straight! It might as well be you.
NO, I really do appreciate the grammar help. Lord knows, I for one, need it! ;D

Paul,
Thank you for doing this. I think it is kinda neat to look over and see that huge tally on reads and comments attached to a piece of my work. It may not give it credibility but it sure does look cool! ;)

Thank you for all of your help, and flexing the muscle. Is there a MOD of the MONTH award?
You have my vote if there is!

Lee