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Skulls of Wisdom (an excerpt from MoriaVaratu)
« on: December 20, 2007, 04:33:06 AM »
"Wait a moment, I thought I just saw something of interest over here."
Helen said and moved towards a statue in the center of the room.

He turned and followed her curious at what she had seen.

There in the flickering torch light he saw them. Four crystal skulls neatly lined up at the base of the statue.

"Whoa!" He said under his breath. "Unbelievable."

"Hirham do you know what these are?" She asked in a reverent tone.

He answered her question with a slack jawed look. He just stared at the
artifacts on the floor in awe.

She bent over and picked one up. It was obvious that the skulls were
solid throughout by the shear weight they possessed. She handed the
first skull over to him and he was expecting it to be cool to the touch
after sitting in the cool dankness of the cavernous room for so long.

To his surprise it was warm to the touch and seemed to
vibrate slightly in his hands.

All of the sudden he wanted to know what they were and realized Helen was doing something he had come to hate over the years they had worked together.

She was pausing for dramatic effect, building suspense. Over the years he had learned to counter this move by pretending not to be interested but he could not do that in this case so he gave in quickly.

"Helen?" he shrugged trying to prompt her with a hand gesture almost
dropping the skull.

"These are the four skulls of wisdom." She said excitedly.

"Do you mean the holy relics supposedly used by the Incan Sun God?"

"No, the Sun God is Inti." she answered shaking her head. " Viracocha,
he that came before Inti.

"These skulls were said to be the source of all his power.
Power that could bring enlightenment and death all at the same time. It was written that Viracocha used these to bring down fire from the sky to vanquish the enemies of his people."

"It seems there is still power over fire still left in these skulls,"
he replied. "Check this out."

He moved the skull he held in his hand a bit further from the torches'
flame and it sputtered out plunging the room into thick blackness. He then moved it back towards the torch and it leapt to life again.

"Unbelievable," she breathed. "Hirham this is THE holy grail of
pre-Incan beliefs."

"And WE are the ones who uncovered it!" Hirham said excitedly. "This is absolutely amazing." Hirham said with a giddy tone in his
voice. "Apparently these pre_Incans were more advanced than anyone
had ever imagined."

"You may be more right than you know Hirham." she bent over and picked up an object that was tucked behind one of the remaining skulls
on the ground. She blew a layer of dust off the object that was an inch thick.

"What in Hell is that?" he gasped.

In her hand Helen a very peculiar object. It had what appeared to be a
metal casing with a flat crystal mounted on one side that reseambled a display screen about two inches square.. It fit in the hand much like a small sleek cellphone and appeared to have three crystal buttons just below the screen.

She turned it over in her handsand noticed the metal was stained with blood.

"What could it be?" she asked. "It looks modern."

"Hand it here," Hirham asked shoving the skull at Helen. To her
surprize he snatched the artifact from her.

She shot him a glaring look as he touched one of the crystal buttons. A
low hum eminated from the object and the square crystal "screen" began to glow with a soft blue light.

Hirham and Helen exchanged worried glances then he quickly set the
object on the ground and backed away from it eyes wide and fixed on
the artifact.

Helen suddenly realized she too, despite her curiousity, had taken a
few steps back herself. From the "screen" shot a tiny beam of light about six inches above the device.

The beam began to pulsate and rotate more and more rapidly until it began to take on a strobe effect. The beams began taking the form of random lines.

Helen and Hirham just stood in place fixated on the blurry image that
began materializing . It resolved into a spinning three dimensional globe of the Earth hanging six inches above the object on
the floor.

A small red light blinked over what appeared their location.

"Jesus Hirham," Helen looked up at him a huge smile growning on her
face," we have just found the proverbial 747 in ancient Egypt here."

"Hell 747 my ass!" He scoffed," This is the freaking Space Shuttle!"

They both grabbed ahold of one another embracing in a hug.

"Our names will go down in history," He stated excitedly, "as the two who discovered it!"

The device on the floor began to beep in slow ominous sounding low
tones about one second apart.

They exchanged worried looks with each other and began backing away.

"I really don't like the sound of this Hirham," Helen said fearfully as
the tone began to crescendo into a shrill shreaking high pitch.

The frequency and volume of the tones increased and they each noticed
that the crystal skulls had now began to glow with a bright white light.

They could feel the heat flowing from the skulls even though
they were now halfway across the room to the huge chamber door running in fear.

The whole room lit up in brilliant light burning like a hot poker at the scientists' eyes.

The huge door slammed shut sending chunks of the ceiling slamming to the floor knocking both of them to the ground.

Hot air rushed in burning the inside of their mouths and filling up their lungs in searing pain.

The very moisture within their bodies seemed to be sucked out in a moment of very excruciating agony.

Neither one could do or say anything as their bodys began to shrivel in the heat.

Moments later their bones were indistingiushable from the other bones that lay about the tomb.

Outside the side of the peak collasped sending an avalanche of jungle
foliage and soil over the entanceway bathing the peakside and
valley below in a huge pile of choking dust.

Later that day Dr. Hirrham would get his wish. His name would go down
in history afterall.

Their names would appear in history as a tiny blurb on the major newswires.

"Two archaelogists and their team of native guides went missing in the
Andes Mountains this afternoon when a landslide near the ancient
site of Machu Pichu occured. Machu Pichu was uncovered by the famed
archaelogist Hiram Bingam in the late 1920s..."

Most periodicals never even printed the story. After all, there was more
important news this day. A new strain of the flu virus was discovered in China, and ten peolpe died of it this very day.

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Re: Skulls of Wisdom (an excerpt from MoriaVaratu)
« Reply #1 on: April 15, 2020, 06:03:52 AM »
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Re: Skulls of Wisdom (an excerpt from MoriaVaratu)
« Reply #2 on: April 16, 2020, 07:02:24 PM »
Hi David Lee Jones.  You want input, I’ve got input.

Is this the last chapter in your book?  If so it seems like it should be more drawn out.  A lot of big stuff happens in so few words.  I think a reader would be disappointed if they read a long story about your characters and then you killed them off suddenly in just a few paragraphs.

The dialogue sometimes seems a little forced and awkward.  The opening line that includes “something of interest” sounds like a TV reporter’s script rather than fellow archeologists blabbing to each other.  Other examples are “hand it here” and “what in Hell is that?”.

The dialogue tags need help.  Sometimes you do them right and sometimes you don’t, so it seems like you know how to use them but don’t do it consistently.  Some spellings need help too.  Let your spellchecker do the work for you!  It makes everyone happier when reading.

In the middle there is a near-magical thing that happens with their found objects.  It made me wonder what the point was.  Was the light show to dazzle the people for fun before killing them?  It seemed so extraordinary and it made me think that something spectacular was going to happen next.  Instead, there was a cliché Indiana Jones ending.