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Review My Work / Re: Please, help put me through with this sample essay
« Last post by PIJ1951 on September 11, 2020, 10:48:45 AM »
My deadline was so closed and made me nervous! But these guys managed to do my homework for me on time, and I got A for it! Many thanks!!!

. . .except, you didn't get an A for it. They did. Cheats never prosper.
The Writers Circle / Re: Do you write every single day?
« Last post by Khiidaw88 on September 11, 2020, 09:23:58 AM »
The important thing is that it engages my brain and keeps me working (my fingers are typing, my brain is formulating a combination of words in a specific order, etc.? So e en if Iím not writing something for my current project, I can at least engage that creative part of my brain that makes me a writer.
Itís like reviving your engine. You donít expect to get anywhere, but itís always useful to fire up the motor and practice going through the motions. Once, I had no phone and a ten minute break with nothing to do. I took out a pen and a napkin and started brainstorming names for my next heroes and villains.

As long as you keep writing, everything you do will help get you to the finish line.
The Writers Circle / Get a new job!!!
« Last post by oker288 on September 11, 2020, 07:38:02 AM »
Hi there ,
In 15 minutes, another interview with an important Belgian Newspaper "Het Nieuwsblad" (The Newspage)
wish me luck!

Thank you for coming in and reading.
The Coffee Shop / Re: What are you reading?
« Last post by Nora on September 11, 2020, 04:57:10 AM »
Hav, by Jan Morris. This edition has an introduction by Ursula K. Le Guin, which is what drew me to it. Amusing anecdote from that intro: due to Morris's more typical work as a travel writer, many people wanted to know how they could "book a cheap flight" to this enchanting city. Le Guin dryly observed that, due to many people's poor understanding of fiction, they did not realize that it is not the destination that is the problem, but the origin of the trip: "You couldn't get there, in fact, from London or Moscow, but from Ruritania, or Orsinia, or the Invisible Cities, it was simply a matter of finding the right train." What a loss, now that she is gone!

BTW, I am enjoying the book, apart from Le Guin's scintillating intro!

Review My Work / Re: Please, help put me through with this sample essay
« Last post by MiaWi on September 10, 2020, 02:17:24 PM »
My deadline was so closed and made me nervous! But these guys managed to do my homework for me on time, and I got A for it! Many thanks!!!
I echo PIJ1951's comments. I'll keep my advice short and simple.

Go back to basics and learn how to write a sentence!

(Do let us know who these "professionals" are by the way. They both clearly had an off day by the look of it.)
Review My Poetry / Avian Tooth
« Last post by Cliff Sombito on September 10, 2020, 05:26:11 AM »

Avian Tooth

The hangman lingers for the rope
while the dewdrop coins
the mellowness of the white rose
and the black winds scream
as a legion
of dwarves sack the golden city
of the divine. Time
has ran like a bullet train
in the windowpane of your eyes
and you must be executed
before the avian tooth wanders
in the cold soup
of arthritis. Incantations of demise
roll off like beads of molten
lead from your blistered tongue
and you've lost all hope
just like an emptied wallet now
that your fate
has already been sealed by the kiss
of the wolf. As you lose
your foothold, your body dangles,
the rope hums and the air
that you can't
breathe sings for you.

The Coffee Shop / Red tea or rooibos tea?
« Last post by oker288 on September 09, 2020, 09:47:24 PM »
Hi everyone!
Rooibos tea originated in South Africa. It has properties known as tea that can suppress hunger often because it contains flavonoids. And asparatin Natural nutrients that help reduce food cravings. And helps keep you full longer There is also a study by the University of Stellenbosch states that Red tea can reduce anxiety and relieve stress. Thus helping to sleep better Both red tea contains other nutrients, such as magnesium, that help calm the nervous system. Helps the brain to relax Sleep deeper And has brain calcium used to produce the hormone melatonin Which is an important hormone that can help increase the quality of sleep itself.

Thank you for coming in and reading.
There once was a programmer analyst
Who worked for a guy with a hammer fist
He went on vacation
All over the nation
And returned with his head in an abacus
Review My Work / Re: The Bird Call, Chapter One (1036 Words)
« Last post by PIJ1951 on September 09, 2020, 07:03:37 AM »
You appear to write well, but you make your readers work hard in this opening chapter.

I agree with the previous poster - there are too many secondary characters - and they all have really weird names which makes it even more difficult to keep track of who's who (and who we can safely forget about).

The plot arc is also rather jerky:

The bathroom is the last place I would expect any book to be hidden - especially when it turns out it was on a bookshelf all along - so the phoney dramatic opening is a major misstep. Why is there a sudden panic to find the journal at this particular moment in time anyway? That's never explained - unless it's the author's way of letting us in on K's secret. It's a false start in my opinion.

Then we have the strange reaction to the dead starling (presumably a way of displaying K's uncontrollable mage powers - and maybe there's a connection to his father's injury). But you allowed any suspense created by this scene to fizzle away. We're forced to sit and wait for the plot to move forward while this group of friends watch sports followed by birthday preparations and some throwaway lines about a beast in the fog.

I'm sensing there's more intrigue to come, but so far it's a bit of a muddle and the danger is we will end up skim reading in search of the interesting bits.

Good luck.
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