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The Writers Circle / Re: Do you write every single day?

« Last post by HPvD on May 09, 2020, 03:09:08 AM »

Besides doing all kinds of daily writing, as you can read about in
previous replies,

I also discovered an other type of - Comment writing - other than only writing Comments on Blog posts, also writing Comments on - Tweets -

At first I didn't even know you could Interact, other then "Passively"
Like or Retweet,

I couldn't see any of the Comments on the Tweets also not when I clicked
on the Text-balloon icon below the Tweets....,

So at first I didn't understand why I couldn't see any Comments,
appears that you need to click on - the Number - beside
the Text-balloon icon, to see the comments.

So now when you ask a question in your Tweet,
I might interact with you writing you an answer.

Review My Poetry / You Lied!

« Last post by LunaStar on May 07, 2020, 01:28:54 PM »

I welcome anyone to try and articulate what this poem is about. Honest feedback on how well it was conveyed would also be greatly appreciated. Thanks...
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Endless loops on a dead end street.
Why do you suffer me so?
Oh spark of life,
Oh holy fire.

Bringing false promises of shine,
as you hide in the dark.
Fueling the madness that is held in us all,
while you fool the world
with a story so old.

Oh that great story,
that great and terrible story
of glory and fame,
of love and war.

Stand amongst the chaos and recite your song.
Tell that story to the suffering soul.
Guise your darkness in that cloak of lies.
See how much longer
the world will swoon.

No longer can I join in this charade of fools.
I will stand a far off from your shores,
with your glittering beaches and sunless seas

Oh holy fire
Oh spark of life
Why do you suffer me so?
Oh endless loop
and dead end street
don't suffer my soul
anymore...
Just leave me be.

Review My Poetry / Re: Warn the poets

« Last post by LunaStar on May 07, 2020, 01:08:12 PM »

First of all, it's a beautiful poem.
It took me multiple reads to grasp it's deeper meaning.

You say you are not a poet and then use the word "us" in the first verse as you refer to poets. LoL!
It's a uniquely written piece.

Feel free to disregard these few words of advice:

I feel that the "we've begun" at the end of the sixth line, does not belong and could be omitted, for it adds confusion rather than clarity. Unless that was your intention.

In the tenth line, either you should say "fragments of that which we cannot see" or " fragments of what we cannot see".
I feel like there should be a question mark after "Is not the warmth you bring to my life?"
Then the last line, instead of "Nor even you, nor me" you might try " Not even you, nor me." or "Neither you, nor me."

Just my opinion!
Hope this helps.

The Coffee Shop / Re: The MWC Bar/Red Barren Bar

« Last post by Noizchild on May 05, 2020, 08:28:25 PM »

Quote from: JTetstone on May 05, 2020, 03:19:27 PM

I thought this was a bar. Is everyone visiting the Red Barren on drugs!?

Just you.

The Coffee Shop / my poetry site

« Last post by JTetstone on May 05, 2020, 03:38:34 PM »

I tried to post another post about my site but it wouldn't post. I wanted to let everyone know my poetry site is safe. It was created with FrontPage 2003....The Spirit Within Poetry site is safe. I will not remove the link. I'm leaving it for those who know the site author. -Jan Tetstone

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Writing Games & Challenges / Re: the last person to post here wins

« Last post by DGSquared on May 04, 2020, 01:52:04 PM »

I arrive, a poet.

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