The script is a little hard to read because of the formatting, I suggest using more paragraphs. There should be gaps after each character talks, for example

BRETT
Hi, Jason, Jase

JASON
I can' talk right now...

This would make the piece less confronting to read.

Hi all, my name is Kerry
I am 20 and an animation student
I'm excited to read new things and try to give helpful feedback

Im wondering is it fine for me to post scripts for screenplays?

@jy334769 When I was really young, I once went camping with my friends in the woods.

I can't say for sure if I was right or not, but I saw a big broken tree branch with 'red paint' (or maybe blood?) covering the upper half of the branch. Either my imagination was wild and I scared myself, or maybe it really was only paint.

I didn't dare go near that branch, nor to find out more. My friends and I turned around quickly and walked down another path.

Hope this helps 

Great points @TRex

@Tashnim Rashid Tawsif, I feel your story has potential. Just need to do some editing, add a little extra flavouring here and there, and you just might have an awesome story!

Good luck! 

This is an interesting idea.

A couple of things I noted:

1. I agree with pltrish that the timeline seems a bit jumbled and hard to follow.

2. I love the use of the em dash, but there was a bit too much of it and it became distracting to me.  That might be just me since I often find myself using the em dashes too much, but I thought it was worth pointing out.

3. There are several spots where I think less is more.  The "sometimes" in the first sentence after the equation.  I think it reads better as "sometimes of birds, cars, human-faces and suchlike."  Same here:  "I couldn’t talk, eat, or feel anything but a burning ache in my heart."

Good luck with the story.