I knew it!! I bet you wave a space force flag, and pretend you're  Captain kirk of the enterprise, too. Beam him up scotty   

1.) Actual quote is Scotty beam us up.

2.) I was doing the Tom Hanks movie.

I'm glad all of the meaning isn't outwardly available.

The fundamental problem here is that without meaning the reader has nothing to interpret. . . so you're writing for your own self-satisfaction and no one else's. There's nothing wrong with that, but don't expect us to give your work a second thought.

It’s good to push boundaries and try something new, however creative endeavours need to do 2 things; say something and connect with people and this does neither.

If you think of the original artists, poets and novelists of the last 50 years they have done these 2 things. They have communicated an idea, but there is nothing here to think about.

Are you able to explain what, ‘a tfk a;e,’ means in a way that people would understand, because on the page it makes no sense.

Hi, I agree with the other comments; nice imagery but you are telling and not showing us the story.

Of course, a story will have a mix of showing and telling, but you should really start a book with showing us some action.

For example you write- “There is a lot of spirituality in Lily Dale.”
Why not give us a funny or tense opening scene that shows this. It could include some interesting local characters or a particular incident.

Good luck!

Hi. Is this poem about two legged dears or four legged deer? If its about 4 legged deer, it reads like the writer is suffering from 'deer fever'  Not quite sure which deer/dear this poem is about. Welcome back to MWC.

no clue! thanks