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The Coffee Shop / Re: The MWC Bar/Red Barren Bar
« Last post by Noizchild on May 29, 2020, 01:49:25 AM »
I knew it!! I bet you wave a space force flag, and pretend you're  Captain kirk of the enterprise, too. Beam him up scotty    ;D

1.) Actual quote is Scotty beam us up.

2.) I was doing the Tom Hanks movie.
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Welcome Board - START HERE! / Re: Hello!
« Last post by JTetstone on May 27, 2020, 04:49:25 PM »
Hello Mary and welcome to MWC.
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Review My Work / Re: listen for her
« Last post by PIJ1951 on May 27, 2020, 05:57:26 AM »
I'm glad all of the meaning isn't outwardly available.

The fundamental problem here is that without meaning the reader has nothing to interpret. . . so you're writing for your own self-satisfaction and no one else's. There's nothing wrong with that, but don't expect us to give your work a second thought.
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Review My Work / Re: Critters
« Last post by Robotics101 on May 26, 2020, 08:25:25 PM »
A critter is someone who critiques stories.
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Review My Work / Re: listen for her
« Last post by j2burg on May 26, 2020, 02:16:34 PM »
It’s good to push boundaries and try something new, however creative endeavours need to do 2 things; say something and connect with people and this does neither.

If you think of the original artists, poets and novelists of the last 50 years they have done these 2 things. They have communicated an idea, but there is nothing here to think about.

Are you able to explain what, ‘a tfk a;e,’ means in a way that people would understand, because on the page it makes no sense.

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Review My Work / Re: Critters
« Last post by j2burg on May 26, 2020, 01:03:41 PM »
What is a critter?
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Review My Work / Re: Salem, Ch. 1 and 2
« Last post by j2burg on May 26, 2020, 01:00:59 PM »
Hi, I agree with the other comments; nice imagery but you are telling and not showing us the story.

Of course, a story will have a mix of showing and telling, but you should really start a book with showing us some action.

For example you write- “There is a lot of spirituality in Lily Dale.”
Why not give us a funny or tense opening scene that shows this. It could include some interesting local characters or a particular incident.

Good luck!
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Review My Work / Critters
« Last post by Robotics101 on May 26, 2020, 03:14:14 AM »
Hi. Newbie looking for critters of Sci-fi, Sci-fi/crime, Sci-fi/mystery-thriller.  :) I hope this is how I'm supposed to ask?
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Review My Poetry / Re: a thousand deers passing
« Last post by ssilvs on May 25, 2020, 11:47:13 PM »
Hi. Is this poem about two legged dears or four legged deer? If its about 4 legged deer, it reads like the writer is suffering from 'deer fever'  Not quite sure which deer/dear this poem is about. Welcome back to MWC.

no clue! thanks
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Review My Poetry / Re: a thousand deers passing
« Last post by JTetstone on May 25, 2020, 06:48:02 PM »
Hi. Is this poem about two legged dears or four legged deer? If its about 4 legged deer, it reads like the writer is suffering from 'deer fever'  Not quite sure which deer/dear this poem is about. Welcome back to MWC.
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