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Review My Poetry / Re: Leap
« on: July 05, 2018, 03:03:23 AM »

It's a poetic device. Alliteration for a start. And then those words serve to introduce each stanza, characterizing the tone of the forthcoming sequence of emotion-events. They also add a rhythm by slowing the pace down at intervals. The blink breaks the pattern, indicating a shift to a new paradigm which then betrays itself. Like obtaining the unobtainable object of one's love worship and then being disappointed by reality. 

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Review My Poetry / Re: hello
« on: July 05, 2018, 02:50:06 AM »

Poetry is indeed condensed language and less is more, your poetry teacher was right. It's just become old-fashioned to capitalize all lines but it doesn't mean you can't do it - depends on the form and style. Scratch back through the pages here, look at poems by Tom 10, dave, drab, matty 11 and myself for examples of contemporary poems.

What happened here was that the place was in the doldrums but still ticking over and got taken over by new owners who changed things in the site architecture which led to spam problems and a subsequent lack of cooperation by the owners to help the moderators deal with the spam made everyone annoyed and dismayed and a lot of prose members left to start Best Writing Forum and the poets started The Tangled Branch. All about 6 months ago. Like a ghost town here now but that's okay for posting void poetry, my new genre.   
 

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Writing Games & Challenges / Re: the last person to post here wins
« on: July 04, 2018, 05:11:58 PM »
I win! I win! Wait...what did I win?

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The Gallery / Re: When Men Were Slaves
« on: July 04, 2018, 05:09:41 PM »

It does feel a bit ghostly tip-toeing around here... did you not permanently emigrate to BWF, then? I've been on a few other poetry sites but none of them feel right, this place is like a pair of old sneakers. Think I'm going to start posting a new genre of poetry here... void poetry -   :-\  Place seems to have got the spam under control, so why not?

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The Coffee Shop / Re: The Crap Joke Thread / Adult Content
« on: July 04, 2018, 05:02:26 PM »

African bush ranger type character turns up at a small lake full of a skinny-dipping cheerleader team neck deep in the water. 
"Go away!" shouts the cheerleader leader.
"I will," says the ranger, "as soon as I've fed the crocodiles."   

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Review My Poetry / Re: hello
« on: July 04, 2018, 04:51:11 PM »

Hiya David, welcome to MWC. This place is just a hollow shell of what it used to be... dropping poems here now is kind of like one hand clapping. But that can be okay too.

Your poem is interesting, good even, for a first outing. You have a natural ear for rhythm, the cadence I found was complex, staccato almost, in places. Last S was good, last line was good with some internal near-rhyme serving as a finishing couplet. You may think all this is BS because none of it was intended... doesn't mean it won't show up, poetry can tap into the collective that way sometimes.

Couple of tips with contemporary poetry - there are no rules but generally if you're using grammatical punctuation, the piece is written in prose-like grammatical form except for line breaks. so this means not capitalizing the first word in a line , as opposed to a sentence. I hope that makes sense. Try and avoid repetition and clunky phrases, poetry should be treated as an oral form firstly; how would it sound to the ear.

Anyway, you have something, hope you enjoy composing more poems. 

     
 

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Review My Poetry / Re: Uncertain
« on: July 04, 2018, 04:30:50 PM »

Just a bit of froth - thanks for look and comment.

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Review My Poetry / Re: Change
« on: July 04, 2018, 04:29:43 PM »
i think your application to volunteer at the suicide prevention call center will be denied.

 ;D

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Review My Poetry / Uncertain
« on: July 03, 2018, 06:27:37 PM »

If I had super powers
I'd hitch a ride
on the wing of a jet,
go see what is what
with Rin Tin Tin.

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The Gallery / Re: When Men Were Slaves
« on: July 03, 2018, 06:20:26 PM »
Gasp - a live one spotted at MWC or is it a ghost of Heidi past?  :o

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The Writers Circle / Re: Keeping track of timelines
« on: July 03, 2018, 06:16:42 PM »

Transitions can be tricky to handle well consistently. Broadly, one thought is to give the reader due credit by not overwriting or being too telly when making a leap.   

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The Coffee Shop / Re: The Crap Joke Thread / Adult Content
« on: July 03, 2018, 06:10:46 PM »
I used to play the triangle in a reggae band but left because it was just one ting after another.
  ;D irie, mon

So this baby seal walks into a club...

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Writing Games & Challenges / Re: the last person to post here wins
« on: July 03, 2018, 06:08:17 PM »

Not so fast, Richard.

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The Gallery / Re: When Men Were Slaves
« on: July 03, 2018, 06:04:38 PM »

Interesting read - 

Ego is a function of power which is a function of money which is a function of ego. .

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The Gallery / Re: Poem: My God Is
« on: July 03, 2018, 05:55:45 PM »

Welcome back, Janice. Have you perhaps written another poem to post in the meantime?

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