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Messages - matty11

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The Writers Circle / Re: Leaving MWC
« on: January 10, 2018, 03:23:05 PM »
Isn't there an option whereby admin manually approve registration?

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The Writers Circle / Re: Leaving MWC
« on: January 08, 2018, 04:43:33 PM »
Fire-fly, I'm waiting on a reply back from the dev team on this, I have raised the question, in the meantime I'm checking daily to remove spam posts and we are still tweaking the security to prevent such posts from overrunning the community.

We appreciate your patience as we work thru these challenges.

Thanks!

That's a time consuming, thankless job, since spam is automated. Wouldn't it be better to switch off the automated registration? Use time to activate only genuine registration?

A reply on the registration process used on another site:

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It is a bit time consuming but not too bad. Some names are obviously spam and I donít bother to investigate further. Generally speaking any real person will email if Iíve missed them so I donít worry too much. Itís far easier than being swamped as we have in the past by bots and spam.

best

matty

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Self-Publishing Central / Re: Very First Publish Made Today
« on: December 29, 2017, 11:48:19 PM »
congratulations

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Authors' Resource Centre / Re: Hooks - What are they
« on: December 29, 2017, 11:46:17 PM »
Good advice. thanks.

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Review My Poetry / Re: before the bath
« on: December 29, 2017, 10:49:21 PM »
hi Indar,
          I like the way this starts in the domestic, the title drew me to read, and the imagination works from there. Reflects how the life of writing threads into and from life.

cheers

matty

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The Coffee Shop / Re: Spam
« on: December 29, 2017, 07:23:11 AM »
I think that the forum needs closing down, at least until the spam problem can be cleared up. What do others think?

Or close the registration for a while. I've seen other forums destroyed by spam. It cannot be fought manually.

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Review My Poetry / Re: Working for the National Trust
« on: December 28, 2017, 02:22:22 PM »
Thanks Tom and Indar. I've tweaked the ending again because it felt too telly and strident.

all the best

Matty

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Review My Poetry / Re: waxsome is new
« on: December 28, 2017, 02:17:50 PM »
Definitely sparkles and sizzles Mark. I like the sound of hiss-kiss fretwork and sidewalks fried. I guess you want to keep holiday/sideways/saturday/tray, but if you do choose to tone down the sibilance then warm-blue suburban throb sounds great.

best

matty

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Review My Poetry / Working for the National Trust
« on: December 27, 2017, 04:48:26 AM »
revision

That African mask, painted with ochre,
threaded with hair sucking on bones,
its lively chatter of jungle tones
ghost the gilded themes of this tour.

The shadows ink across splendid
portraits. These Gainsborough ladies
in formal gardens -  waterlilies
and roses - lives slavishly scented.

This crowded cafe bubbles with chit-chat,
a broth of varied voices. We've paid
for tea and homemade cake and that
'Diary of a Country Parson'.

What sugared past do we consume
and trust in our comfortable rooms?

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original

That African mask, painted with ochre,
threaded with hair sucking on bones,
its lively chatter of jungle tones
ghost the gilded themes of this tour.

The shadows ink across splendid
portraits. These Gainsborough ladies
in formal gardens -  waterlilies
and roses, lives slavishly scented.

This crowded cafe bubbles with chit-chat,

a broth of varied voices. We've paid
for tea and homemade cake. The past

sugared in many ways. It matters.

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Review My Poetry / Re: confessions
« on: December 22, 2017, 07:07:18 AM »
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Often I sit on my porch
in a red rocking chair,

That is a great opening, hooked, and I hoped that the rest of the poem would deliver - it did! Really enjoyed all, in particular a stain of betrayal hugs the knuckles and dirt/pressed into wrinkles.

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In any case
my grip has lessened,
arthritis crackles
and my thumb locks
for no reason.

Give the endline emphasis to the verb rather than the dangling conjunction? Just a thought.

best

Matty


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Review My Poetry / Re: That sound across the estuary (revised)
« on: December 22, 2017, 01:27:08 AM »
Thanks Drab. I like the alliteration in L2 and agree with Indar on the sonics.

L7 was originally based on a Yeats reference, which was too obscure for readers. salting, could imply a negativity.

The present L7 was intended to hint at illusions, a positive one rather than ghouls. It doesn't have any poetic panache, though the sounds and straightforwardness work to an extent. I will ponder some more! It is a matter of getting the mood music right.

best

matty


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Review My Poetry / Re: Nothing to Forgive: Song of Iosheka
« on: December 22, 2017, 01:08:46 AM »
Hi Sharon,
              Just two points of clarity, which maybe me, but...

aliens...I didn't understand...aligns?

Ivory...antlers are made of bone?

best

matty

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Review My Poetry / Re: That sound across the estuary (revised)
« on: December 21, 2017, 08:39:36 AM »
Thanks Sharon. I think with a little nudging from readers, the poem has progressed!

best

matty

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Review My Poetry / Re: Nothing to Forgive: Song of Iosheka
« on: December 21, 2017, 08:36:14 AM »
hi Sharon

I do like this genre. The delivery can mimic pidgin English, but that is not the expression here. The plain diction, with a few exceptions, sounds authentic. Personally, I don't hear a voice that would include such vocabulary as Venus/zenith. Very much liked the amber fist. S1 is fab.

best

matty

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