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Review My Poetry / In The Village
« on: May 22, 2016, 10:02:47 AM »
Hi I'm taking a poetry class and this is this week's homework.  It's meant to be prose poetry, but I'm not sure if it sounds more like a narrative.  I have to use certain lines, which I've highlighted in bold.  I also have to end with the word 'air'.
Above the goat's shelter the bushes wave
at me. They're dancing in delight to their
own evergreen tune. "Look how green we are!" they
trill.  "Alive and lovely in this withered, crusty

On the dehydrated earth four sturdy
stumps elevate a large slab of wood. Some
goats rest under it, anticipating
the lush green grass that the rainy season
will soon bring.  Some trot and roam, contemplating
the pigs and strategically defacate
just to make sure everyone knows their place.

I itch to explore the other side of the
happy bushes and soak up some of their
energy. Maybe there are more of them.  
Even happier. "There are snakes," says Auntie,
"under the bridge."

Nearly two hundred miles north of Kampala,
two things become clear: a slab of wood haphazardly
 thrown across a stream, evidently to
aid safety, but one slip and in another
you could have a painful, bloody
hole in your skin, has me trapped. In the light
breeze there is a trace of frying meat,
maybe goat, probably chicken, so it
must be  around five o'clock.

The daylight will check out in less than two
hours in order to check in at its other job,
serving the other side of the world. When the
sun and the animals start to retire
for the night, behind the shadows I imagine
rock pythons uncurling in the dusty dark air.

The Coffee Shop / How many books do you read each week?
« on: May 10, 2016, 03:09:48 AM »
I'm  frustrated. I only really read during my one hour journey to and from work.  Lunchtime I normally just take twenty minutes then go back to work.  Unless it's something like a Karin Slaughter it takes me ages to get through anything  :(

How about you?  Is reading a top priority?

Review My Poetry / Ebenezer Bubblesneezer
« on: May 06, 2016, 03:32:39 PM »
Ebenezer Bubblesneezer
took ten bob so he could please her.
Iced cream teas.
Songs in keys.
Far harder with a nose disease.

The Writers Circle / Five Lies Creative Writing Teachers Tell
« on: April 04, 2016, 05:29:06 PM »

I found this article I thought I'd share it with you.  Some of it I believed in until now, some of it is new for me.

Happy Writing!

All the Write Questions / Scrivener
« on: April 04, 2016, 02:21:10 PM »
I did a search on here for pros and cons of Scrivener.   No one has mentioned it since 2012. Is there something newer/better on the market? Does anyone still use Scrivener?


The Coffee Shop / What is the first thing you do when you get to work?
« on: March 09, 2016, 05:46:14 AM »
I mean before you actually start working?

I have to clean the desk (because of hot desking). Once I'm logged on I check the restaurant menu for the today's lunch options.


The Writers Circle / Character Names
« on: March 05, 2016, 04:15:20 PM »
Do you choose your character's names at the start of writing or fill them in later?

I have a list of first names that I'd like to use in stories.  I'm going to have a stab at the latest short story competition. I have a story idea but can't start without a name.

Review My Poetry / Eternal Rest
« on: March 04, 2016, 05:59:55 PM »

The street drew to a cool hush while
the street lights warmed and shone.

The mother drew the curtains while
the father locked the door.

The baby stirred in his dreamland adventure.

The mother called the grandmother while
the father followed current affairs.

The mother stroked her sonís exquisite skin.
She thought about her blessings and her peace.

The father watched.
He thought about his blessings and his peace.

The street grew cooler still while
strays paraded and performed.

The mother slept and dreamt of her old self.
The father slept and dreamt of new blessings.

The baby stilled.
And stilled.

The neighbour woke and listened while
the mother clamoured and screamed.

The father called for help while
the mother prayed and begged.

The mother begged God.
The father begged the paramedic.
The neighbour watched.

The cool street warmed into a new day while
the birds chirruped morning greetings.

Welcome Board - START HERE! / South London Gal
« on: March 03, 2016, 01:53:45 AM »
Well this place looks interesting...

I've been writing on and off for about ten years.  I'll be posting some of my short stories for review in the near future.  I need to spend more time using prompts and writing just to get into the habit rather than waiting for inspiration to slay me.  I need to work on my punctuation.  Big time.

Why do I have to log in for a set time?  It's irritating because the total time logged in is inaccurate, so I get booted out just as I'm ready to post. >:(

Is this a UK based site? I think it is.  If I start taking about  eating a fry up on the pavement in my jim-jams you won't  get lost will you?

Nice to meet you!

The Writers Circle / Characters but no story :-(
« on: March 01, 2016, 05:18:19 PM »

I created my first characters about ten years ago but I never knew what do with them.  I've made a lot of progress re building my character's personalities and backgrounds.  However I still don't have a full plot.  I've got some events for some characters and I know who are primary and secondary characters.  But I don't know what to do to progress the story!  I've written about 7000 words.  What should I do?


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