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Title: The Gradual Immersion in Nihilism (Poetry)
Post by: MikeyBoy! on December 30, 2021, 09:27:55 PM
Nihilism - the rejection of all religious and moral principles, in belief that life is meaningless.

Your tendencies are killing you, for what if the human race has lied to you?
Searching for a purpose in the accursed world while you control what darkness has consumed you.
You relentlessly search for a purpose or a meaning, only to come to a halt and a blank.
There is no point to find meaning in this pointless life, is there?

People have lied to you about what life could be, about what your life could be.
That life perhaps would be what you are looking for.
Soon you found out for yourself it was all lies.
Lies Lies Lies.
Now, where are you? Are you stuck trying to figure out things yourself?
Or should you just give up?

You cannot find yourself in this world.
This world is meaningless.
We were put into this world to find a purpose for ourselves only to find out that whatever purpose we want will soon be crushed by the world itself…by Life itself.
Suicides rank up as people give up.
Your Existential Nihilism is getting to you.

Moral principles are useless, as they are just rules for humans to follow to find a purpose in a life that is only meaningless.
The best thing to do in this life is to give up on what the world and what your life wants.
And to finally immerse yourself into Nihilism.
This is called your Gradual Immersion in Nihilism.

MW. 2021

(Feedback on my Nihilism Poetry! I wrote this as I am a Nihilist. This was on a Google Doc, but I was unable to get the Link)

Title: Re: The Gradual Immersion in Nihilism (Poetry)
Post by: bbruise on December 31, 2021, 01:11:42 PM
Why do you want to write this as a poem rather than a blog post?
Title: Re: The Gradual Immersion in Nihilism (Poetry)
Post by: OleksySF on January 07, 2022, 12:40:21 PM
Interesting writing. I did enjoy it. My suggestion on technique would be to clarify for the reader who the audience is (if your purpose is not to be vague). Are you talking to yourself, the reader, or a specific person while the reader is listening?

As far as content goes, the statement that "we were put into the world to find a purpose" seems out character and (for me) throws off what I assume to be premise of your piece. You also state moral rules are put there to help us find our purpose. So you are telling us there is purpose and you know the path to find it, but because things are getting tough ("will soon be crushed") you have so far failed to find it (again, this is confusing because I don't know who the audience is). It sounds like you gave up when the going got rough and need an excuse to do what you want; and giving it a title is a way to make yourself feel better about it. If that is what you meant by this piece, then it works for me, but I'm not sure it is what you meant.