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Poets Corner => Review My Poetry => Topic started by: Lucky Stars on March 19, 2021, 07:18:06 PM

Title: The Edge (Deleted 3/30/21)
Post by: Lucky Stars on March 19, 2021, 07:18:06 PM
Hi everyone,

Thanks for your help with my poem. I have decided to pull it from the site.

Title: Re: The Edge
Post by: Patrick.G on March 22, 2021, 08:59:23 PM
"Sometimes I wake too early,
wondering if I left your key under the mat."

absolutely love this, it makes the poem relatable and truthful.
Title: Re: The Edge
Post by: crch on March 22, 2021, 10:59:43 PM
Welcome!

I completely understood your poem, and it evoked emotion.

I think the middle of your poem was not as melodic as the beginning and the end. 

Maybe if you break it apart and listen for timing, it would flow easier.

Nice work
Title: Re: The Edge
Post by: Lucky Stars on March 30, 2021, 05:14:21 PM
Thanks for your feedback. It will help me make the poem better. Happy writing!