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Poets Corner => Review My Poetry => Topic started by: Dar_Var on March 12, 2021, 06:08:12 PM

Title: The Fire Within
Post by: Dar_Var on March 12, 2021, 06:08:12 PM
Oh! The fierce fire’s flames flew freely,

fluently flowing and fluttering with finesse,

while flickering its fickle flame frequently,

as its flare flips and forms a fortress,

and forces out the freezing fear finely.

 

Oh! The bursting blaze burns brightly,

Bringing belief and bestowing bravery,

And building the broken bricks and bailey,

Boasting, buried beneath, the brimming beauty,


-Sudarshan
Title: Re: The Fire Within
Post by: Dar_Var on March 12, 2021, 06:08:37 PM
Kindly review the poetry and say your thoughts. Thanks
Title: Re: The Fire Within
Post by: jt72 on March 12, 2021, 06:41:40 PM
One only has to post one post...Yours shows as you posting same poem twice.

"Sudarshan" isn't there a chemical plant that goes by that name?



Title: Re: The Fire Within
Post by: Dar_Var on March 12, 2021, 06:48:45 PM
Haha. That's just a common name in India.
Title: Re: The Fire Within
Post by: jt72 on March 12, 2021, 06:50:12 PM
Haha. That's just a common name in India.

I  learn something new every day. ;)
Title: Re: The Fire Within
Post by: jt72 on March 12, 2021, 06:55:04 PM
Oh! The fierce fire’s flames flew freely,

fluently flowing and fluttering with finesse,

while flickering its fickle flame frequently,

as its flare flips and forms a fortress,

and forces out the freezing fear finely.

 

Oh! The bursting blaze burns brightly,

Bringing belief and bestowing bravery,

And building the broken bricks and bailey,

Boasting, buried beneath, the brimming beauty,


-Sudarshan

The poem speaks of relief from a  burden.  I like the flow of the words.