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Title: HELP! What do you think this sentence means?
Post by: MJTennant on May 08, 2019, 03:52:57 PM
Hello all

So, my story is aimed at young adults so I would say from 16 to 21 type of age.  This is my audience.  Could you tell me how you would read this line.  I am fine with the English / grammar but feel that this could be read two ways.  For a bit of background, Abigail (the protagonist) has just met her stepbrother for the first time and he is a complete (ass###e) to her and storms off in the middle of an argument.  His name is Connor.

I am just aware that in some countries / places that the wording I have used could be misunderstood.

If you could please tell me what how you took the meaning of this I would really appreciate it.

Thank you in advance.

M J

I must admit, it was the best display of man-tantrum I had ever seen, even better than Bens after Id blown him off for the third time.
Title: Re: HELP! What do you think this sentence means?
Post by: nosuchmember on May 08, 2019, 04:39:59 PM
Hello all

So, my story is aimed at young adults so I would say from 16 to 21 type of age.  This is my audience.  Could you tell me how you would read this line.  I am fine with the English / grammar but feel that this could be read two ways.  For a bit of background, Abigail (the protagonist) has just met her stepbrother for the first time and he is a complete (ass###e) to her and storms off in the middle of an argument.  His name is Connor.

I am just aware that in some countries / places that the wording I have used could be misunderstood.

If you could please tell me what how you took the meaning of this I would really appreciate it.

Thank you in advance.

M J

I must admit, it was the best display of man-tantrum I had ever seen, even better than Bens after Id blown him off for the third time.

It reads better with an 'a'...

I must admit, it was the best display of a man-tantrum I had ever seen, even better than Bens after Id blown him off for the third time.




Title: Re: HELP! What do you think this sentence means?
Post by: Kit on May 30, 2019, 04:15:38 PM
Don't know about Yorkshire, but here in the states, when 16 - 21 year olds read this line: "after Id blown him off for the third time."

They are going to giggle.
Title: Re: HELP! What do you think this sentence means?
Post by: Zoey141 on August 28, 2019, 11:27:49 PM
That does sound funny...if you are not too attached with the sentence, consider replacing the words 'blown off'.
Title: Re: HELP! What do you think this sentence means?
Post by: tudogz on November 20, 2019, 10:20:42 PM
Don't know about Yorkshire, but here in the states, when 16 - 21 year olds read this line: "after Id blown him off for the third time."

They are going to giggle.
Not just 16-21 year olds.
I'm past 70, and I got a chuckle.