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Title: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: Tom 10 on February 25, 2016, 02:01:30 PM

My Muse Passed Out


My muse passed out
she got sh*t-faced last night
and is sleeping it off.

She ran off with the mailman.
My muse hides in the attic
behind leather suitcases.
She cashed my bonds
and split for Vegas.

My muse has narcolepsy.
She got into the bad weed,
found the last bottles
of the bathtub gin from March a year ago.

She gets hives from my computer screen
and hates my keyboard.

I give up making excuses for her.



Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: cmb on February 25, 2016, 02:09:47 PM
Nice one. I'll be back tomorrow. My laptop is about to pass out right now. That, and I need food.  :D
Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: Mark T on February 25, 2016, 04:29:18 PM

Ha! At least she provides good material. Nice one, T.
Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: 510bhan on February 25, 2016, 04:29:39 PM
Just a tad misogynistic Mr T! I am outraged by this. :o
Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: Gyppo on February 25, 2016, 04:36:14 PM
Maybe she's just been out on loan for 133.  In which case she's earned a rest.
Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: Tom 10 on February 25, 2016, 06:44:38 PM
Just a tad misogynistic Mr T! I am outraged by this. :o

Hardly!  She has abused me and my good nature mercilessly and has been awol much too frequently.  I refuse to cover for her any longer. >:(


Thanks for the look-see's Gyppo, Mark, and Liam. :)
Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: Lon Palmer on February 25, 2016, 06:52:06 PM
Interesting, but reads a little too much like a laundry list for me.
Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: thatollie on February 25, 2016, 06:55:03 PM
Maybe she's just been out on loan for 133.  In which case she's earned a rest.

It's a good thing she didn't come this way to try to get me to write anything, my own muse is quite the jealous type.
Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: Tom 10 on February 25, 2016, 06:56:55 PM
 ;D ;D ;D
Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: Alice, a Country Gal on February 25, 2016, 09:16:20 PM
Tom,

take for her a moonlight walk.
Ply her with chocolate and strawberries.
Let her know you miss and need her.

She will return with a smile,
be nice, attentive whats needed.

She'll warp her arms around your neck
and once more, whisper in your ear
the words you've been lost without.


Okay, not much in the way of poetry . . . but I'll bet she could fix it.
 
Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: drab on February 25, 2016, 09:33:08 PM
Yeah, like that's gonna happen! Mr. Prolific  ::)
 
Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: Tom 10 on February 25, 2016, 11:52:35 PM
What a charming poetic response, Alice!

drab - we both know the name of the real prolific one starts with 5. ;D
Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: duck on February 26, 2016, 05:30:16 AM
Tom
This is excellent and hilarious and proves itself to be utterly wrong. It is a classic case of the pot calling itself black.
Dave
Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: kateD on February 26, 2016, 08:38:33 AM
If you find her, tell her to send mine on home. I'm sure they're off gallivanting (probably with several others).
Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: Tom 10 on February 26, 2016, 08:46:47 AM
 ;D ;D ;D
Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: cmb on February 26, 2016, 09:11:53 AM
Mine's most likely drunk.  ;D
Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: Gyppo on February 26, 2016, 10:52:04 AM
They're all the Muse Spa, pigging out on chocolate and Chardonnay, throwing bread rolls at the pool boys.   Mine had the courtesy to send a email.

Having a good time with the other lasses.  Weather here, wish you were lovely.  Please send money. 

PS:  Sending this via my Galaxy because they make us check in our laptops on arrival.
Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: Tom 10 on February 26, 2016, 11:00:45 AM
They're all the Muse Spa, pigging out on chocolate and Chardonnay, throwing bread rolls at the pool boys.   Mine had the courtesy to send a email.

Having a good time with the other lasses.  Weather here, wish you were lovely.  Please send money. 

PS:  Sending this via my Galaxy because they make us check in our laptops on arrival.

;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: kateD on February 26, 2016, 11:06:06 AM
... they make us check in our laptops on arrival.[/i]

Lest we should relent and message our masters an idea.
Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: matty11 on February 26, 2016, 11:22:07 PM
Playful, and hugely entertaining Tom.

best

matty
Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: Lon Palmer on February 28, 2016, 01:47:02 PM
I think that I would like this better if there was a timeframe of some sort, not as mechanical as "On Monday, she . . . ; on Tuesday . . . ," but something.
Title: Re: My Muse Passed Out
Post by: Tom 10 on February 28, 2016, 01:49:51 PM
Thanks Matty, Lon, for reading and commenting.
 :)
T