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Title: A Perfect Day
Post by: souldesire on March 14, 2010, 05:16:57 AM
Hi,
I'm a bit nervous as its the first time ive posted any work on here. I would gladly welcome any help/advice/feedabck for this story. Especially concerning structure, narrative, point of view etc




 
Title: Re: A Perfect Day
Post by: Lin on March 14, 2010, 05:31:29 AM
If you would like a critique on this please send me a PM and I will provide my new e-mail address for you to send it in a proper format.


I liked the sound of the story!


Lin x
Title: Re: A Perfect Day
Post by: souldesire on March 14, 2010, 05:40:43 AM
Hi,

Ive tried sending you a PM. Not sure if you got it though! Shall I try cut and pasting this story instead?

Thanks for the reply.
Title: Re: A Perfect Day
Post by: moosprojects on March 26, 2010, 06:28:36 PM
I have just joined the writers circle and yours was the first story I have read.I live in Rural Andalucia and have four ex strays. It is estimated that some 80,000 dogs live wild in this part of Spain. I can't comment on your style as I am only just starting out myself,but I could feel the strong emotions behind it. That to me is most important in any tale.   onward and upward    john
Title: Re: A Perfect Day
Post by: Lin on March 27, 2010, 05:07:32 AM
Send me an e-mail that should work.

Lin x
Title: Re: A Perfect Day
Post by: mcseveny on March 28, 2010, 08:20:18 AM
My first read on here and I enjoyed it. I think there was some brave writing in there.